Wow i love your wording... it sounds so forbidden, this poem. i like it... you're great with the rhythm. 5/5
mishka :)

I really liked this piece. It was very expressionate and it was deep. It gave off that intensity that should be included in a dark poem. And you def gave it off! Love it!

Sky fades into tomorrow
Everlasting, impressing sorrow
Dark, Macabre, Dancing free
Prevailing winds, our enemy

^^My favorite! This is an awesome opening! I love it! Great work!! 5/5

This is freaking great, your flow is amazing and the wording was impeccable, great imagery too. wonderful wonderful write... 5/5

Beautiful poem :)
The rhyming and rhythm is perfect
The only thing I would change is in the second stanza, last line, it would sound better as “life has but just begun”
And in the fourth stanza, you should put an adjective before ‘sleep’ such as ‘endless’ or something (I’m no good at adjective XD)
You begin and end it perfectly, amazing.
5/5
~rayleen