Wow great way to make things known your words were put together perfectly and i enjoyed reading it

5/5
laura

I read this poem over and over again. It could be that I don't understand what you want to say with this poem, but this poems seems unfinished. Maybe you could explan it somewhat more.

Wow. i liked the way it started, but i have to agree with judith ^^it didn't seem like the poem was finished to me. but i liked it. i give you a 5 and this was my absolute fave stanza

Grey wisps waft within the air,
Envelopes a nearby child.
Her breath becomes short and labored,
As she falls to the ground.

Wow. your words were amazing in this. =]

I liked this breathtaking masterpiece..Your imaginery was great and your word usage was suitable for the poem

My fave lines are;

Filth and trash cover the earth,
Never to disappear, never to decay.

Good job
Take care,
Laura

We have all been guilty of being selfish a time, two, and even three in our lives. It is human nature and one that we will not be able to be rid of any time soon.

This was good and seemed to scream a hint of truth to everyone that reads it.

--Sher

I love the way that you put your words together... I liked the end allot.. one again there is nothign that i can say bad

once again 5/5

The way you put your words together is good it got better and better with each and every line 5/5

I liked the retorical question you added intho this piece, I also liked how you ended up answering therefor not making it so retorical but actually made sense of it. This was also another truthful piece by you, your work is really honest and shows so much emotions written in depth. Word choice again really effective. Well done. Loved this one alot. ~Mel

First of how imaginative was

Poison tainted clouds cover the sky

wow, what a sentence, really really exellent. The thoughts and feeling that appeared throughout were really shown by the language you used really good job xxx alex xxx