Wow this was just dark and haunting. The flow was amazing and the rhymes were flawless. The images you created were compelling and perfect. It was just amazing and truly provoked emotion in me.

"Black mascara streaks the crimson tide"
^beautiful.

well done *5/5*

Very deep poem, it is so emotional and you truly wrote it on the excellent way. I love your word choice and flow is great too. You expressed so many and so powerful feelings and sadness amazingly. Well done! Whole piece has truly effective rhythm and you put your self in to this piece, it is so personal and complex. Totally unique too. It has some really impressing lines.

"Black mascara streaks the crimson tide
Lost and alone, she is dying slowly inside"

love this part so much.
so well written.
it flows nicely and makes so much sense, i understand it so well. i really like this poem, keep it up

xx

Wow! Beautiful poem...haunting and dark....so desriptive too....I loved it! It flows with emotion and flowed beautifully.....you did an awesome job on this one! Great job! 5/5 :)

This very dark and deep, I loved the vocabulary and the way you protrayed the images was fantabulous, excellent job definite 5/5

Imagery stands out in stark relief bringing a vividness to this one. The rhyming works for it as well. It does have that certain dark atmosphere. The topic cliched but given in a darkly beautiful way.
~Faith-less

This is good, well, I like it anyway. The only real promblem I'm having is deciding whether to vote it a 4 or 5. I think the best thing about this poem are the words. They're really good and you've used them rather well indeed, once again, this is just my personal novice opinion. Good work love.

Brad

P.S. I'm going to vote it 4 because I'm hoping that will push you to write even better, plus, I like to be very strick with my vote to make up for all these other people who hand out 5s like they're going out of fashion.