Your poems are such a joy to read. The complexity and the story like telling of the poem is incredible and very enjoyable. This poem was even more enjoyable due to the fact that you used quite a bit of medical information in the middle and also by your ending. I like the ending because it leaves a question to the reader to answer. Is it true or not true, referring to the paranoid and out to get me line. You leave it open and let the reader decide for themselves, which I think is nice. I always like to either have a very strong ending or a ending that makes the reader stop and think. Both are great ways to end a poem.

The imagery is really incredible in this poem. I feel as if I could be this person, alone in his room, trying to get help but unable to. There's also a lot of emotions of helplessness in the poem as well, which makes sense because of the situation. There is also a simplistic side that I really like. For instance, when the main person is screaming for help, but no one can hear him because the tv system is too loud. Subtle things like that make the poem a lot more natural and easily gives the reader a way to relate and understand.

There's honestly a lot I could pull from the poem and dissect, but for sake of not writing a five page paper, I will leave my comment as thus. I must note that you did a wonderful job with your metaphors in this poem. You kept to them from start to finish and tied everything together really well. Very mature writing.

In all, I was not disappointed in the least. Your writing is always profound and fun to read. I especially like this one because it is telling a story, and since I know a few people who suffer from this kind of condition, I felt like I could understand what the person was going through. I hope you continue to write and learn and grow. Great job and keep writing!

This poem took me on a trip upon a magic swirling ship . I am speachless

I see science and poetry coming along here hand in hand.
Its a story with simple explanations coupled with vivid
imagery making it interesting as well as entertaining for
your readers. You always seem to cook up interesting
thoughts in your poetry making it unique.

Excellent!

I enjoyed reading this poem! I really do think this was about a mental disorder? Or did I understand it wrong? The fact that the person is bascically on their own is a sad thing almost makes me think of scizophrenia since no matter where they are they are alone. The very fact that there was no one to help them shows you how the person is treated: poorly, like they (the other people) don't seem to care one whit if that person dies and if they die alone I bet they wouldn't call 911 if they did find them. Watching a t.v. that loud would make me want to smack them since I would keep the volume down and just in case if I hear something I would go and find out unlike the people in this poem. Also this is my last sentence, loved the imagery it was stellar regardless that you triggered my inner mom in me (which sucks), loved the way it flowed and I though it was nice the "ation" part in the first stanza maybe you did it before or after the whole what does .... have in common (yes I forgot what were the words I know it just had in common the logy part). Anyways great read 5/5

-Mori