I loved this. the tone was soft and romantic. it sounded so real and sweet. i have to say that a couple of rhymes sounded perfect but a few others were iffy. but the wording was great and the style and flow was absuolutely fantastic.
Okay, your rhymes seemed a little forced, which messed up the flow for me. Also, your words were simple and didn't really catch my interest. Everything you said I've heard before in another love poem. I don't really like love poems at all though, so I might be being a little picky. For me to like one, it has to be very creative, original, something I haven't read millions of times. I can tell you really love the person you're talking about, though and I bet they'd love this poem a lot. It was decent, just not breath taking. I hope my comment wasn't too harsh. I don't like being mean... ><
Short and sweet, and full of love. very sensitive with loads of the words having a very exotic and loving meaning to them. the imagery was very vivid and i thought i could feel and hear and taste everything that this poem had. well done.
Beautifully written. Although I'm not a pro on the structure of sonnets it looked good enough to me. I love this poem, it made me tear up a bit. Whoever you've written this about is a lucky person. 5/5
First of all very nice and cute poem, the words match and everything flows great. But in this line :
"I wish if I was the lucky breeze
The breeze that touches your cheeks"
I think the "If" should be "that". Other then this good sonnet, loved it ! Especially the end!