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How could something so right,
Turn out so wrong?
How could a love so bright,
Have been a lie all along? "

that last verse is very sad, but also very well written.
your rhyme is good,
keep up the good work
hope your heart heals, and you find someone right for you.

-chris

YOU SHOWED YOUR FEELINGS WELL REALLY LIKED THE LAST VERSE GOOD JOB

I'm really sad 4 u :(..u perfectly described ur feelings in few words..wish i'm able to do the same..hope u'll find "the right love"..hope u'll move on..well here is my tiny advice on moving on..dun try to FORGET abt it..as u'll NEVER forget..just try 2 remember the sweet moments y had together..and so let them be cute moments u once had..wish u happiness :)

I know what kind of emotion you are havin right now...But things happen for a reason and definitely it will be for good..Just try to go out with your friends and make youresl occupied, it will help you not to think of him..Just be strong honey...Everything will be alright..

I really enjoyed reading this piece because it's so true and I can relate 100% to your words. We get into these relationships and no matter who were with or for how long we talk about forever. While were young it doesn't seem like a bad idea, but as we start to get older we realize it had very little or no chance at forever. Great job and flow with this piece I've been through this many times 5/5 GG23

Yeah , BIG MISTAKE . Dating best friend turns out BADD . I recently learnt this .. I dated my best friend of three years , and we were together for two .. And then he cheated on me . Talk about depression . I really love the poem tho .. It makes me think back , and it brings out alot of emotion . The rimes are amazing .. 5/5

Awh hun. I'm so sorry. This was an amazing poem. Beautifully written. No flaws. Accept one thing that bothers me.3rd stanza 2nd line. I just feel the semi-colon doesn't need to be there. But maybe that's just me?

Anyway, great peom.

5/5

Aww god how i know how that feels...great imagery i love how you just laid your feelings out. i do that with many of my poems check them out if you want. really nice job with this one.

How could u say this poem isnt that great when you hav put so much life and emotion into it? it was a fabulous poem coz it conveyed all ur inner thoughts in a beautiful way. great poem, tyhings will start looking up... in time. =)

OMG this poem is sooooo greattt!!!!!
Why would you say it's not???
Anyway ... wow.
Are you okay?
I understand how hard it is.
You'll find someone else though!!!
Don't worry.
If you need any advice, just send me a message, k??

Great poem!!!! :)
5/5

This poem is beautiful. It hurts so much only because it evokes so much emotion out of me, but it is so eloquent yet simple at the same time. I really love how the last stanza wraps it up so well. I encourage everyone who goes through a break up to delve into poetry. I hope you have found happiness now, and I know this is an old poem but it's a truly great write, and the beautiful thing about our poetry and our words is they act in the present just as well as the day we wrote them up. I love it. Great job.

This is a touching heart felt piece, but tell yourself that, you two were not made for each other. Don't force your destiny. With time, and when you came upon the right person, you will see that memories of her almost erase from your memory. Very good piece, kel.