Unloved Dreamer

I'm sleeping on this cloud
Hoping not to fall through.
I used to be so colorful
Now I've faded to a pale blue.

Beautiful. The only thing I would change is get rid of the word ‘pale’ in ‘pale blue’ to fix the rhythm

I just wanted to help
Make things okay
Now I'm heartbroken
Now that's she's gone away.

Great rhyming, great rhythm and great word choice, I wouldn’t change anything here. :)

I barely knew her
But she made me smile
She won't remember me
As my tears fall tonight.

You seem to lose the rhyming scheme a little bit here, but it remains a very touching and effective part of the poem, how you remember her but she hardly remembers you. Very touching.

I'm lost here in my thoughts
I used to be such a believer.
Now I'm nothing
But an unloved dreamer.

This is my favourite part, you end it so well and everything about it is so flawless.

Beautiful poem and i wish you luck and hope you feel better <3
5/5
RayLeen

"I used to be such a believer.
Now I'm nothing
But an unloved dreamer."

I like that. The slight rhyming really ties it all together. The title drew me in, and the poem lived up to it. Very nice. :)

I love this poem it shows so much emotion and i can totally relate i give it 5/5 keep it up :)

This is a beautiful poem yet sad it reads more like a love poem

"Not I'm nothing
But an unloved dreamer."

Now I'm nothing
But an unloved dreamer.
works better for me

Wow, this is excellent. I love the emotion in it. Good job!!! Keep it up. the rhymes are good, along with the flow.

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