Open Hearts

As often as I thought,
That we could go with our hearts,
That was the day you came,
And nothing was ever the same.

*I like how you started this. It's simple, but it makes me want to know how things changed.*

As the days turned to weeks,
I was no longer able to seek,
So you came in and stole my heart,
That's when things fell apart.

*The second line bothers me a little. You say you weren't ale to "seek". Well what were you seeking in the first place. I would change that to "see" It doesn't end with a "k" but it still rhymes and makes a little more sense. But other than that I liked this stanza.*

We fought and yelled at each other,
Cause we really didn't love one another,
Now as often as I thought,
That we could go with open hearts.

*You ending wasn't as strong as I would have liked it to be, but I like how you ended it how you started it. That was clever and also effective. I love the style and the diction was good too. Keep it up. Nik*