Comments : A Whole Different Story

  • 8 years ago

    by Second to None

    It was really good.

  • 8 years ago

    by Jay Perry Jr

    You did a good job on this poem. I love it

  • 8 years ago

    by junet

    This is the poem i like in your pieces.
    it has told everything about you and you've done great here.

    simple but interesting story...

  • 8 years ago

    by Martha

    Its lovely.. I loved the way you wrote the poem... somehow the repeating of lines are OK...keep up the good work! :D

  • 8 years ago

    by Erickson

    Excellent poem! One of the best poems I read in a while. Sure we all sometimes feels like this, being afraid of showing ourselves, so the most we try, we end being someone outside. Really enjoyable, keep It Up

  • 8 years ago

    by Erickson

    Excellent poem! One of the best poems I read in a while. Sure we all sometimes feels like this, being afraid of showing ourselves, so the most we try, we end being someone outside. Really enjoyable, keep It Up

  • 8 years ago

    by Kit

    Nice job! I like it.

  • 8 years ago

    by efstathia

    Thats amazing, i feel :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Meme

    Awesome job :)
    liked it so much
    5/5

  • 7 years ago

    by White Orchid

    This poem was soooo good!! I loved how you described what you appear to be to people on the outside, but inside you feel completely different as if you were suffocating from putting on the front on the outside. I thought this poem was just awesome!! :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Boy

    The idea is great. and the poem is a sad poem no doubt. but i personally think that two main words "inside" and outside are used at wrong places. just imagine for a one second if u use the "outside" word on to the word "inside". and the "inside word on to the "outside". this poem would be more good and sad. i rate it 4.

  • 7 years ago

    by Boy

    Or maybe i read this poem wrong. and mix inside and outside words.

  • 7 years ago

    by Miss Lonely Teacher

    Simple yet powerful. i just hate how these feelings happen so often

  • 6 years ago

    by Matthew Schut

    So deep! I know this is an older poem but it is written so well! Always here for you friend! :)

  • 4 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    The first two things I noticed here was the title and the difference in and outside. This is a very unique poem by far.

    The way you started out is really good as it shows howyou hide your true feelings. I love how much I relate to this and I think everyone can. You can show a ssmile and inside no one truly knows what you are going through. Your heart os breaking but you show happiness. I think Its easy to help people when you have been through so much. It's hard to show people how you really feel inside though. Thats why we have our own outlits like writing. You want help but sometimes the best help to help others.

    I love the smiling and laugh as it shows how much it is hard to hide sometimes. You don't want to show people how you are feeling because you feel like they will judge you and push you away. Inside your heart cries because you don't know what to do. You want to be honest but its tiring trying to fight yourself. I love how you say you are a stallion. They are truly majesticand strong. I love how you ddescribe yourself as such. A feather is weak and fragile so that makes so many details to show how much you hurt inside. You are fragile and broken.

    I understand you are everyones friend because its easy to make friends when you are positive and happy. But Ialso uunderstand that when with friends you feel so alone no matter who you are with. You conceal your feelings because you don't want to worry your friends and be a burden. You want help so thats why you want your feelings to show. Its conflicting I know this well. I love the ending as it shows two different sides and throughout the whole poem. I love seeing the difference s here great write! 5/5