Comments : Beautiful Anger

  • 14 years ago

    by Daniel Rutter

    It would appear you had a hard time trying to find things to rhyme. I would suggest for your writing, that you either: Don't bother rhyming, as it gets to be a pain... OR Only rhyme every second line. Your verses are fine, but I found it hard to take seriously with the... simple rhyming. I have this problem myself, but I tend to skip out on the rhymes and just write whats in my heart. I'll give you a 4/5, and I'll keep an eye out for your future stuff.

  • 14 years ago

    by Angel1030

    Please read Expecting More, this is my experiment your advice. Give me your honest opinion.