Almost Lovers

by silvershoes   Sep 24, 2010


Summer leaves
and with her takes your
soft warmth I should have held.

Fruits of surely almost lovers
gone one thousand leagues.

Days shuffle by, wandering aimless,
filled with dusty imprints left by your
passing footsteps...

steps spun by infectious bliss
only to wither as tides crawl in
and wash away drunken kisses.

I rushed my fingers
vigorously into yours!
No, but if I had,
this next part would be
unwritten:

Fragile acceptance inched forth
for it is known
you and I are doting friends...

and claim not I the better claim
when chance was at my door.

Summer leaves
and with her takes your
soft warmth I should have held.

Fruits of surely almost lovers
gone one thousand leagues.

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  • 13 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Your use of words are extremely descriptive and bring not only enjoyment but imagination to the readers.
    Well done

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Perfect word choice JANE..PERFECT..this was realllyyyy poetic...yet started witha very sad mood..but a beautiful sadness sure.
    I found ur images and expressioons..ffresh..new creative..
    and no bet I loved the repetition ..gave it a gd tone..
    such a talented one u are!!!

    thnx for sharing this one5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Jad

    A interesting write, with a great metaphor that really keeps the readers attention throughout the entire poem. Always a good thing. Next is the repetition of the last lines with the first line, I for one thought that was a neat thing to do as it put even more emphasis on the meaning in those lines.

    "steps spun by infectious bliss
    only to wither as tides crawl in
    and wash away drunken kisses."

    Simply amazing. The flow, word usage, and imagery in this one line can prove without a doubt that you have an an extraordinary talent. The emotions you poured into this poem were varied as well, but always seemed to give off some type of joy with yet a little sadness. An overall amazing piece that was wonderfully penned. Great job and keep writing.

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