I really love this, Jane!
Nominated the next week.
The words, the style and structure... damn it, so perfect and unique.
This thought will not change you.
This poem will not move you.
These words will not strike you into motion,
nor will you be drummed on by my inertia.
^ I looove it, the way you put the 1st two verses into two separate sentences. It kind of emphasizes your tone and adds some melodious tunes.
Added to my faves.:)
5 years ago
So I'm going through the first half of this poem cracking up, because I am reading this to the tune of that I can ride my bike with no handlebars song... If you don't know it, youtube it. How friggin funny.
Otherwise, the piece is absolutely amazing, not that I'm surprised. Interesting and clever, I like the raw thickeness of it all. It's very 'here you go, but you won't listen, I know it' feeling. Love, love, love.
I still have an iota of doubt, as 2 y they should remain silent in d mind, _Unwritten? We rather keep Talk'n though, they may b just Watch'n..I guess. All d same, d rich blend of words, subtly moved my finger. Much enjoyed this reality. Thanks 4 reminding us, once more. High 5!
5 years ago
To state that your words and contentions won't move us or influence our opinions or actions you open the door and lead us in. When we get there we know we have been caught and we are already moved and influenced both. Well done. This is splendid.