Comments : Slippery Slope

  • 6 years ago

    by Decayed

    I really love this, Jane!
    Nominated the next week.

    The words, the style and structure... damn it, so perfect and unique.

    This thought will not change you.
    This poem will not move you.
    These words will not strike you into motion,
    nor will you be drummed on by my inertia.

    ^ I looove it, the way you put the 1st two verses into two separate sentences. It kind of emphasizes your tone and adds some melodious tunes.

    Awesome, indeed.
    Added to my faves.:)

  • 6 years ago

    by Britt

    So I'm going through the first half of this poem cracking up, because I am reading this to the tune of that I can ride my bike with no handlebars song... If you don't know it, youtube it. How friggin funny.

    Otherwise, the piece is absolutely amazing, not that I'm surprised. Interesting and clever, I like the raw thickeness of it all. It's very 'here you go, but you won't listen, I know it' feeling. Love, love, love.

  • 6 years ago

    by silvershoes

    Britt, I had to reread my poem to the tune. Of course I know which one you're talking about, it was only on the radio every other song for months!

    Thank you though. I love reading your comments.

  • 6 years ago

    by Decayed

    Congrats Jane.

  • 6 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    Two of the poems I nominated won,I am fantastic.. :D

    congratzzz on a very very very very
    well-deserved win..

    you are amazing.

  • 6 years ago

    by Britt

    Congrats on your win, chicky! Love it!

  • 6 years ago

    by Jordan

    Your words say that they will not move me and yet they do just the opposite! Excellent stuff.

  • 6 years ago

    by rachael

    This read, to me, as precisely the type of mind jelly-leftovers I always seem to feel fall out of my mouth following especially intense midterm/finals weeks. Thank you.

  • 5 years ago

    by Adeele Muuli

    Fantastical! Really unique style yet Its made so well!

  • 5 years ago

    by Marvellous

    I still have an iota of doubt, as 2 y they should remain silent in d mind, _Unwritten? We rather keep Talk'n though, they may b just Watch'n..I guess. All d same, d rich blend of words, subtly moved my finger. Much enjoyed this reality. Thanks 4 reminding us, once more. High 5!

  • 5 years ago

    by Ste

    To state that your words and contentions won't move us or influence our opinions or actions you open the door and lead us in. When we get there we know we have been caught and we are already moved and influenced both. Well done. This is splendid.