Comments : Please Don't Die On Me

  • 11 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    That's what a good friend is for. To stand by your side and help in any way. To open our eyes and see what's in front of us.
    People are very judgemental, you either to fat or thin, you are not pretty or popular
    enough, it can put a lot of pressure on somebody. A true friend don't care, that
    person loves you regardless

  • 11 years ago

    by Elizabeth

    This was..... just so... heart breaking!</3 but i LOVED it. your really good with ryhiming your words and putting words together to sound beautiful. wish i was this good(:

  • 11 years ago

    by Max

    This was a v.good poem by you
    the rhyming was very good

    but in
    "I feel like such a fail
    You cry until you feel ill
    Let me carry you up the hill"
    hill felt forced as there is no trace for it in the poem.

    and in
    "I remember when you scream and cried
    Then I didn't hear from you for a while
    And I thought you had died"
    1st line 'scream' should be 'screamed'

    over all this is a perfect poem
    so emotional and so sad
    very well written
    5/5 keep writing =)

  • 11 years ago

    by Darclyfe

    Omg.. I like this and I understand the pain of this poem.