Comments : In My Eyes (Rictameter)

  • 2 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Ang, you should center this poem....

    Damn it you know how to write this form blindfolded...

    The message goes without saying... Heartbreaking and precious!

  • 2 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    This is so beautiful. A girls first and true love is indeed their daddy. It is also very sad to see daddy fighting this battle with cancer. This poem is precious.

  • 2 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Well done on the win for this poem, sorry it took me so long to notice it!

    It is a beautifully created little poem, and I do agree with Smelly Maple, that you are one of the best poets on here for writing forms and making them look so flawless.

    I think this poem is going to touch many, and I hope it shows people how precious this bond is and how we should not take it for granted, and appreciate it more.

    Beautiful word choice.

    Thinking of you always.
    Please keep writing.

    xxx

  • 2 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    Oh wow, this poem flows flawlessly I love this form as well and you have done such a great job here. This poem is simple but it is complex in the emotions you used here and this seems to be a very personal poem. Of course the subject of the poem is your father, whom you seem to look up to more than anyone else in your life, and I love that you have a personal connection to him, and the way you wrote this, there is love and hope for him even though he is battling cancer, no matter what you will always be by his side. Now the form itself is somewhat difficult to write, but damn I agree with andrea, you did a great job in writing it and making an impactful message from just frw short lines. 5/5

  • 2 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Wow, this is a wonderful and really powerful nugget of genius. I was both in awe of the technical aspect and emotionally affected by the subject matter.

    super work.

    Michael

  • 2 years ago

    by The Fairy Mary Poppins

    Judging Comment

    The style of poem was lovely to see and lovely to read as well. The sentiment really touches a person's heart since family is normally what a person views the most precious. Beautiful read.

  • 2 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judging Comment

    To be a Daddy's girl... is beyond unconditional... when a father is ill, it reminds his daughter just how touching and short life can be, Angie has taken her love for her father and captured the readers hearts and souls with this poem.

    Ricatameters can be a hard form to write because of the restrictions and syllable count.. the flow has to be rhythmic, and Angie is flawless.. a remarkable piece!!

  • 2 years ago

    by cassie hughes

    Such a beautiful little poem which flows so easily. Technically perfect and full of emotion so many of us can equate to. This is going in my favourites.

  • 2 years ago

    by Natalie84

    I recently began a relationship with my father who I haven't known since I was a child. The saddest part is in all these missing years I still felt like daddy's little girl. hes here now and at 30 whole years old...I still feel like it. Every time I read your stuff I feel it! Something I have always said about you. You pull people in....even if it is just a short verse. Xoxoxo rock on friend!!!