Comments : Unavoidable Rain (Diatelle)

  • 2 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Ouch! That hurts :(

    You really seem to express grief and sorrow so well, and in ways which I have never read before, inside forms I have never seen before!

    I really felt like I was inside this poem and I could feel myself agreeing to every line, every image, every point you made.

    If I had to pick out one line that really stood out for me, it would be the middle line,

    loss, leaves lonely tears which no one can share-

    - it speaks so much truth, and it is a such a sad line.

    Keep writing.

  • 2 years ago

    by Everlasting

    Straight to the point. The despair and pain is felt.

  • 2 years ago

    by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

    Many things in this world are inevitable and we must deal with them. You can really feel the pain and sadness in this write. Great job (:

    --- MKKK

  • 2 years ago

    by Augustus Black

    This kind of writing is beyond levels. How amazingly you have described the great pain streams on the soul! I haven't seen your writing with rhyming. But If I talk about the rhyming this is best. Greatly Done! 5/5 STARS.

  • 2 years ago

    by Augustus Black

    This kind of writing is beyond levels. How amazingly you have described the great pain streams on the soul! I haven't seen your writing with rhyming. But If I talk about the rhyming this is best. Greatly Done! 5/5 STARS.

  • 2 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    An amazing write in an amazing form .

  • 2 years ago

    by The Fairy Mary Poppins

    Judging Comment

    The form itself was just breathtaking! To be honest it could've been in free form and I would still have nominated this poem. It packs a punch in so little lines, taking you in a journey of cosmic proportions, the title itself is so bittersweet mayhap because I love rain or because it's; whatever the case may be I still adore this poem. This poet said that it was a fun poem to make I can assure I can't write anything like this! I just can't and with that being said this poem is just a masterpiece!

  • 2 years ago

    by GB

    Weekly contest June 14th
    Judging comment:

    A truthfully elegant poetry format by Meena, as usual the suitable theme for the suitable format with vocabularies flowing excellently to craft this beauty. Very catchy.

  • 2 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Meena I have said it before and i'll say it again, you have such a way of writing about emotion that the reader is simply compelled to keep reading and reading, this is a wonderful form and as all form writing the best ones are the ones that don't read as a form, just a poem, as usual you have written a beautiful and provoking piece 5/5 all day long. Wonderful.

  • 2 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Meena,

    I like the challenge of these strict forms. You have penned an excellent poem within the tight constrains.
    A depression deeply rooted and one that medicines or conversations cannot cure. Tears fall and with them the acceptance of a constant dark shadowed soul.

    Well done.

    Michael

  • 2 years ago

    by Koan

    This form is one of the very best I have ever read!! Sadly no one noticed it but Michael maybe!!! Why do I say this; well my believe is when you write an Diatelle or a Etheree you must aim to one goal only and that would be to have every lines become a single line of statement :

    ~Pain~

    ~no pill~

    ~seem to kill~

    ~this burnt despair,~

    ~words that are poured to fill~

    ~the heart has no strength to repair,"~

    and so on.... Brilliant what this poem is!!!