Kasie, it's good to see you back writing I must say I've missed your words because they resonate so much with me which sometimes is unfortunate as they are usually so full of emotion and rawness yet so beautifully done. This piece is definitely no exception.
1/ This is an extremely sad opening it's like the clock chimes have hypnotised you with its 'deathly ringing' and it's constantly ringing reminding you that death closes in on us every second of every day and sometimes that's all we can think about because it's a terrible thing.
2/ very powerful, we're always wrapped up in the bad times and seem to forget the good times which makes the bad times seem neverending causing us to feel like we're on the battlefield against ourselves and our emotions and usually they win, right? Heads up: typo on wield.
3/ The imagery here is astounding and so sad but it could be me standing there in that field fighting emotions and holding on to a thread of hope and drowning in dreams that we've failed to reach but we can only ever do our best even if that seems far our of reach and not good enough. "Life is just a bag of tricks" < love this line so true.
couplet/ What an amazing end. One of inspirational words because I felt you say times may be tough but we should never give up on our dreams.