Comments : Life starts

  • 1 month ago

    by Lucifer

    I felt your suffering in each line.
    Most of the women give up at some point, either they get used to it or try to suicide.
    I am happy that you tried and got yourself out of it.
    It's good to know you are living the life you have always waited for.

    Stay blessed and happy!

    • 1 month ago

      by Brenda

      L, thank you so much. I found myself turning into someone I didn't like, then when he put our daughter in harm's way I was done. He apparently was not. To this day he still carries so much hate towards me.

    • 1 month ago

      by Lucifer

      Good to see it's nominated.

  • 1 month ago

    by Mark

    Wow. Where to begin...the piece flows amazingly well and when reading it out loud - the tone and demeanor is so clear to reader. The snake references were powerful and my favorite part...'slithering in, breeding dissention, snapping heart strings.' Just a talent to be able to word your emotions so powerfully. Great one Brenda!

    • 1 month ago

      by Brenda

      Mark, thank you so much. He is and was a snake. He was so mad that I actually divorced him, sent him into destruction mode. Any underhanded thing he could possibly do he did.

  • 1 month ago

    by mossgirl19

    My Queen, this is wonderfully expressed. Yes, I too love the snake references in it...it was very fitting to describe how this man acted towards you and your girls. Love the powerful ending! Loved it!

    • 1 month ago

      by Brenda

      Lady Mel, thank you! They say what doesn't kill you makes you stronger. He tried his best yet I'm still standing. Hugs my friend-

  • 1 month ago

    by Em

    My wonderful American friend Brenda where the heck to start? This is honest, raw, emotional and though somewhat sad I kind of see the light at the end of the very dark tunnel you were in with this snake because you are now really happy which is something you my dear deserve.

    I love the title because I believe it states "my life started after you left you sun of a big itch!!" Am I right or am I right lol

    1/ I absolutely loved the word 'sloughed' and believe that's all you can do with snakes like this. I also like the subtle rhyming here to, the imagery is quite powerful because I imagine you shedding this vile man off your skin and him slithering away like the snake he was for your life to begin!

    2/ omg this part did make me shed a couple (thousand) tears because the imagery is very sad. You let this man into your life and put up with his sh!t for 18 years - letting him belittle the wonderful woman you are and my goodness just imagining the things he put you through is enough to make my blood boil.

    3/ I like how you started this with 'stepping off that cliff' because I know just how much of a long way down it looks or should I say a long way up it looks because we are at rock bottom when these turds walk all over us but what does it mean when we're at rock bottom theres only one way up right?? Indeed there is. It's got to be difficult having kids involved I mean I know I sort of did but for them to witness things and sometimes be at the end of it too must have been heartwrenching in itself.

    4/ I literally screamed at this part because I thought yes, she's done it rid of the snake and then he's back (I hope not now) causing trouble, stirring stuff and making you out to be the bad guy - just a general snake then. The words you use here for me are just right they show the emotions you felt and probably still feel towards this creature (was going to say man but he isn't sorry)

    5/ I'm in tears - this is heartwrenching and I cannot even begin to imagine what you went through.

    6/ I literally wooped here! You go B.

    Love you lady.
    Em x

    • 1 month ago

      by Brenda

      Awww Em, thank you so much. You nailed this entire write with your amazing analysis. He caused a lot of problems and I think if he could he'd still be. Thankfully he's just a bad chapter in my life and doesn't control me anymore. You've been there and worse so I definitely know you understand how bad a relationship can get. I've been very blessed since then. A wonderful husband, daughters in my life and grandbabies now. Life has been sweet. Even sweeter with wonderful friends like you! Hugs!

    • 1 month ago

      by Em

      Brenda I'm so glad you got out and you're life turned around for the better even if it seemed like it took forever to do so and that life's treating you well now because you deserve it. I know one day I'll find a real knight in shining armour not one of these idiots in tin foil lol <3

  • 1 month ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A poem bristling with inner strength and determination, Brenda. Well done indeed.

    Ben

    • 1 month ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you Ben, he tried his hardest to destroy me. I'm still standing, just saying...

  • 1 month ago

    by Michael

    Miss Brenda,

    Such a brave and wonderful lady you are, and blooming good for you
    this is a fabulous piece from you lady :)

    Much love

    Michael

    • 1 month ago

      by Brenda

      Michael, thank you so much. It was some rough years that I now can look back on and know its the past. Hugs to you-

  • 1 month ago

    by Courtney Hough

    I love this! YOU are a strong woman Brenda. This poem is beautiful written and packs a punch. Very gorgeous. Favorite for sure

    -Court

    • 1 month ago

      by Brenda

      Court, thank you ever so much for your kind words. Life is never easy but that was probably the worse I ever dealt with. Hugs to you!

  • 1 month ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Your strenght speaks for itself. Awesome peace. Hugs and be blessed

    • 1 month ago

      by Brenda

      Dagmar, thank you so much! We deal with a lot as woman, as parents, as partners to another. Hugs to you also, stay strong!

  • 1 month ago

    by Milly Hayward

    You are strong and talented. Let no man ever take that away again. I'm so glad you got your happy ending. Something a man like that will never experience. Take care Milly x

    • 1 month ago

      by Brenda

      Awww thank you Milly! Never again will I allow that, that is for sure. Hugs!

  • 1 month ago

    by Meena Krish

    This though the words are heart filled with pain,
    they portray the inner strength which you possess and
    never allow anyone or any man to make you feel low in
    every way...rake care

    • 1 month ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much Meena, thankfully I am in such a better place now and I will never allow another person to do that to me again. Hugs-

  • 1 month ago

    by The Lone Ranger

    i love your use of metaphors. they work well in representing the reptilian revulsion and heavy emotional pressure.

    well written piece that is worthy of its award.

    all the best, LR

    • 1 month ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much! It was a dark time in my life. Thankfully I'm in such a better place now and he's just a distant bad memory.

  • 3 weeks ago

    by Free verse

    Life starts when we find true love or it finds us.

    • 3 weeks ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you, yes, it is so true. I wouldn't be where I am today without this true love.