Comments : Running On Fumes...

  • 3 months ago

    by Michael

    Miss Ren,

    Back again with a wonderful piece, albeit with a saddened tone. But the flow has a clam about it, and wham! the ending says so much.
    Much love, hugs and warmth as always
    Michael :)x

    • 3 months ago

      by Ren

      Thank you so very much, sweet Michael :) I truly appreciate you and your wonderful comments. Much love, hugs, and warmth to you as well <3

  • 3 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    WOW, dear Cowgirl! Wham! You are a master in portraying this darkness! I am so carried away when I read this.

    • 3 months ago

      by Ren

      Aww wow thank you so very much sweet Lady!! I appreciate it! <3

  • 3 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A breathless and accomplished piece of poetry, Ren. Good to see another post from you; your work never disappoints.

    Take care,

    Ben

    • 3 months ago

      by Ren

      Wow thank you so very much Ben! That means a lot to me!

  • 3 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Duchess Em beat me to the nomination. :-)

    • 3 months ago

      by Ren

      Awww wowww <3 <3 <3 y'all are the best!

  • 3 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Wow... This is so powerful the imagery and rhyming superb. Best wishes Milly x

    • 3 months ago

      by Ren

      Thank you so much Milly!! <3

  • 3 months ago

    by Sinners gospel

    Ren, all I can say that it is a very very strong piece and glad to see it's nominated but will be more happy to see in on FP.

    • 3 months ago

      by Ren

      Oh wow, thank you so very much!! I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment!

  • 3 months ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I liked this line the most: "I don't mind being"
    because I would have expected to read "existing" or "living", but simply "being" conveys more depth. Your way of writing is precise and unique. It sort of reminds me of an Ellen Hopkins book I've read, but sometimes her prose gets too heavy and doesn't flow as well as it could. So I liked how you separated your lines where it was natural for the reader.

    The imagery that unfolded made me think of a phoenix in flames. I can see this fire, this chaos of light, yet you find release and freedom in it. Of then being able to find yourself in darkness and not have others wondering why you're screaming. It's almost like a silence and stillness that you can touch.

    • 3 months ago

      by Ren

      Wow! Your words are so beautiful. Thank you so very much for such an insightful and amazing comment! I really appreciate it! It means a lot. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece :) take care!

  • 3 months ago

    by Tony

    So on my old account I had a poem that relates to this in a way,

    "Behind my eyes my world is burning
    Still I smile as though all is fine
    I won't bother you in your darkness
    For I've finally embraced mine"

    As I read your lines, I pictured a smiling girl. The "camera" zooms in... into her eyes... and I saw that her world is on fire. I couldn't see through the smoke, but I could hear her... and her words were beautiful.

    • 3 months ago

      by Ren

      Oh wow...that's beautiful. Thank you so much for reading! You should re-write that poem from your old account and post it! It sounds amazing.

      Thanks again, Tony...and stop pressing that button...<3