Yeah I did write it as a song, it is a song but I submitted it here in the format of a poem, there are two chorus' in it the "Would you like a band-aid?..." and the "I'll pour you out..." parts thanks for your comments
Whoops thanks for pointing that out, it's supposed to be "I can make you innocent" but I had it written down as "I can be your innocent" origanally and I guess I accidently typed a combination of what I was thinking and what I had wrote down on accident, I'll fix that right now!
Great song! Sometimes you cant fully appriciate songs when they are just written, but this one is brilliant written so i can imagine how great it would be with music. Keep writing songs like this, it could get you somewhere.
A very stunning set of lyrics you have there! Beautifully written with great description... every word that you wrote I loved, I can't even think of any critizism for it. Well done! And I hope one day these lyrics can become a fully developed song.
I loved the basic wording and bridges and chorus... overall I really enjoyed reading it, but.. I thought it was a bit repititive after you read the same thing two or three times.. I know it's a song, but still too long-winded.
omg! This poem is so good! I can't believe it. I wish I could hear this as a song somehow... Wow these words were so great! I love it!! :) I love this part
Iâ€™ll tear your soul to pieces
And act like things are fine
I don't know why but it stood out in my mind. Two very powerful lines. Great job hun. Keep it up!!
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