Hmm...I see you changed the structure...well...this is good...

Hey i really like this poem it seems ta b a really difficult situation and good luck with it if it isnt already sorted:)

How sad... :( Very good though! You're very talented

Hey again...
Okay my fave bit of this one was:
One I had knew longer
but the other one
I had loved stronger
and even felt love returned.

I try to scream
but only can cry.
My tears muffle
my broken screams.

The whole poem was really grabbing and fileld with emotions. Again it amde em think about feelings of my own... your poems have a habit of making me think. Hehe. Thats great though! Anyway all the way through its about your feelings towards these women and then the end when it's about you is so powerful and a really good ending. I love your poems. You're very talented :). Take Care, Elle xxx

I kinda like the structure of this poem, it's somewhat a little 'broken' in a way that it's unique and doesn't spoil the flow and rhythm. A very heartfelt piece. Good job! =)

Thank you so much for all the wonderful comments... ur poem is amazing... i will be sure to read more of them later but i'm off to bed for now... thanks again... it meant a lot
-Molly

Oh wow, i really liked this poem, especially the end where and how you fit the title in, it was really good. And thanx for ur comment on my poem, i really appreciated it, and i wrote it in that point of view, so that it would draw the reader in and make them put theirselves in that situation, some ppl get it, others dont lol but im glad someone finally did. :)
-Jenna xo

Thanks of all the comments Slider! ^^

I like the way you wrote it. It tells of the realization and concequenses, something not always easy to find in a good dark poem.

Nice job. loved the topic and the flow of the poem. just beautiful.

Great gob i loved it....keep writting and have fun!! please comment and rate my poems..thanks~DARK~

I love this poem! I like reading poems that I can relate to, and this is definately one of them!

How beutiful in its own perfect way.. thank you for the comment too.

This is such a good poem very emotional and deep so well penned and flows easily, you obviously have real talent

This is so sad!.. Really good! Very Emotional.. keep writting!!!