I really liked this poem. it is diffrent. it needs a little more i dont know but it is good. keep up the good work.
Emma 4/5

This is a good poem i like it alot
keep writing

love always
tabby

That was awsome. You are really talented so keep up the good work. *5/5*

Nice job with this... try not to try as hard to make your poems rhyme... it seems a little bit forced.. but other than that its pretty good.. keep it up... once again nice job...

sammie

Wow - truly brilliant -keep writing 5/5 =)

Your rhymes are very simple, but I like the whole idea behind it all. Try to make the rhymes more complicated, something that challenges the mind a bit more.

~Atomic.

Excellent poem. keep up the good work 5/5

Excellent poem. keep up the good work 5/5

You should write more poems. Your a great poet.. Keep up the great job and you are now added to my favorites... This poem was also full of emotion like your other one.. Great write sweetie...
!^I Love Being In Love^!

I liked the flow of emotion -- the longing & realization. Good job. Keep it up.

Forever & Always~ Kate

It's a very good poem but i think if you could make the feelings a bit more motionel i could be good. if you understand what i mean. 4/5

I really like the simple flow, esp. the last stanza.

Im not critising as i can seed this is new to u and that it is quite good but i just wanna say if ur gonna write with feeling it would sound way better if u pour ur soul into it like ur other poem, for me in this one u seem a bit distant. also u dont have to rhyme u can if u want to but a gd poem isnt neceserily rhyme but also feeling, meaning and the way it comes accross. rhyme doesnt matter as long as it flows.

Did you make this for somebody that broke your heart or some that never noticed it in the first place?