Comments : Addicted To Your Flame

  • 17 years ago

    by pale angel

    Wow i love it keep it up

    love ya
    heather

  • 17 years ago

    by *~vixen~*

    Your poems are deep and thought provoking i love them

    *~vixen~*

  • 17 years ago

    by sarah

    Such a deep piece, great job def got my 5 vote keep writing and take care hun sarah x

  • 17 years ago

    by Luke

    Great piece, i loved the imagery and metaphor. congrats, 5/5.

  • 17 years ago

    by Sandra D

    This is really really good!! i love the words you used, and the rhyming was perfect! was this actually about smoking? because you could've used this for anything, like abuse, or a really bad breakup. OR maybe i just think too much about things, and it was about smoking... theres only one correction (don't worry, it's just spelling, in the 4th stanza), instead of "to", the line should say "too" many puffs...
    anyways... great job with this!!
    5.5!

    Forever*Yours

  • 17 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    I really liked this one. When it comes to cigarettes I can definitely relate to this in that way. 5/5

    marcella

  • 17 years ago

    by shawn

    This was beautifuly written, I haveno advise to make it any better. 5+/5

  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Great poem.. its soo intense.. i can really feel the emotion your expressing.. very hearfelt and descriptive.. perfect flow and rhyme.. AGAIN!! lol .. 2nd favorite! hehe :)P

  • 17 years ago

    by amoxi

    This was a very good poem addictions are so hard to break and its sad when someone gets so addicted that it takes over their life great poem 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by in.need.of.a.lucky.charm

    I loved the words, you described what you wanted us to see so perfectly. well done

    much love and many kisses,
    bex

  • 16 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    OMG this is an incredible and beautiful poem. The flow was flawless and the words were just utterly captivating. You create an image in the reader's mind in such a short time yet it is so vivid. You did an incredibly great job on this poem. Great great job.

    5/5
    ~Stephen White

  • 16 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Beets = beats

    And like the cigarette I'm speechless, = And like the cigarette, I'm speechless;

    and from the many lies, choke.= kind of sketchy. It would be best for this or the verse to be removed.

    while telling myself this is enough. =while telling myself that this is enough.

    we both ignite. = we ignite

    I enjoyed this poem a real lot, although you could've made the last verse/line a little stronger. All in all, this topic is largely unoriginal, yet somehow you made it seem original.

    Great job,

    Stephen White

  • 16 years ago

    by Romantic Lover

    I liked your title, when I read it, I was thinking I would be reading a sad love poem. But absolutely not. I like that it was a different topic and again, the flow was great.

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    :) I love this poem! you're really talented! keep up the good work! :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    WOW, all i can say is.........WOW, i mean is a certain kind of symbalisim,(s/p), and using inanimate objects to be people is great

  • This is really good. i once had a relationship like this but soon we broke up. did you have a relationship like this? great work 5/5