Fake A Smile

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m'ks. so i decided i wanted to read the first poem you ever posted up here ((or at least the first that's on your list..)) because i'm weird like that and it's what i do. lol. so here is MY review. ^.^

First off, this actually is pretty good. I don't like the rhyming scheme, but that's because it's just my preference to rhyme every other line instead of how you have it. but again, that's just preference.

Never let them truely see
Just fake a person they want you to be
Faking smiles and telling lies
This is how you fake a life.

^^ the last line in this was breath taking ((if off the meter...lol.)). it needs mas punctuation, but whateversss...i really like how you tied it all together in this stanza.

the poem was short, but it had a good point to it.

plussss...it's really cool, seeing where you kind of started and how much you've improved ((you have improved a ton from what i've read)). good job, missy. ^.^

What the... I should smack you! xD
Scar me, my butt. You take a cliche concept -- EXTREMELY cliche topic, might I emphasize -- and you end it in a way I've never read before. EVER.

Your old work is haunting; that goes past simply having emotion, love :) and at least you only misspelled one word. "truly" -- while the piece you commented, I had like three "your"s when it was supposed to be "you're" LOL .

Much better than mine ! ;D
Case closed. No questions asked. Yup.
..__MiNDYY

This poem caught my attention. I love the rhythm, good JoB! 5/5

This is a great poem. I can really relate to it. I could never write something this beautiful! So, great job!!

A really great poem!
lookes a little bit of my
feelings sometimes

5/5