Eye Contact

This was a short but to the point poem. The structure was good with what you did. The poem had good details about each part and that made you poem even better. Another good poem.

I like the idea of this poem. Though I would not use again so often at the end of each line. I would also do more of a back and forth of he and she, instead of using he or she twice in a row..it tells a sad story and the eyes can say so much. I think you have a good start with this one

I thought it was a great poem. I like the explanation, too.

Haha i like this one a lot it made me smile as i was reading it

btw its cloudy not clowdy, sorry to be picky