Comments : Chaotic Mind

  • 10 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Speechless. Absolutely speechless. Wow, that was just incredible. No other words for it! The imagery of this poem was amazing and the flow was perfect. You're a very talented writer and it couldn't be any better. And I agree with her this has to be one of your best poems EVER! :) Great job, this one was really a pleasure to read. 5/5 Keep it up!

    Stephanie

  • 10 years ago

    by Daenerys Stormborn

    Great poem, I read it twice. I liked the romanticizing of the gun. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Tripp

    Bloody cuts, a broken soul.
    A Chaotic Mind has no control.

    I loved those lines...I don't know why, but the meaning behind it, added to the rhyme made it really stand out...

    Chaotic mind, no memory.
    Only one thought of a remedy.
    Lovely gun, your so kind.
    Tragic end of a Chaotic Mind.

    That final stanza was really an excellent finish to an absolutely amazing poem...it was so intense and emotion filled that I fell right in. I'm definitely adding you to my favorites, since I wanna keep an eye on you :).

    Keep it Up, and don't stop writingggg

    Tripp

  • 10 years ago

    by Tripp

    Bloody cuts, a broken soul.
    A Chaotic Mind has no control.

    I loved those lines...I don't know why, but the meaning behind it, added to the rhyme made it really stand out...

    Chaotic mind, no memory.
    Only one thought of a remedy.
    Lovely gun, your so kind.
    Tragic end of a Chaotic Mind.

    That final stanza was really an excellent finish to an absolutely amazing poem...it was so intense and emotion filled that I fell right in. I'm definitely adding you to my favorites, since I wanna keep an eye on you :).

    Keep it Up, and don't stop writingggg

    Tripp

  • 10 years ago

    by Arcane Blondie

    Amazing poem!! I love the rhyme, it doesn't seem forced at all---The beginning pulls you into the poem right away and the ending wraps it up well! The flow is flawless and the emotional depth is great! Keep writing 5/5 =D

  • 10 years ago

    by ForeverYoung

    Yay, you put it on! its brilliant, really really good!
    beautifuly rhymed and the flow is almost perfect.
    definatly 5/5

    Steph

  • 10 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Nice job. It had the right emotions for an effective read. The only is that mirror doesn't rhyme with years. Keep it up

  • 10 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    Great job on this one...
    The flow was really good...
    and wasnt forced in the poem...
    the way you started the poem was absulutly amazing... it pulls the reader right to the poem... it was filled with emotions... and WOW

    5/5 keep it up always !!!

  • Hey, wonderful poem!!!!! Great rhyming and the metre works really well! I really love the last stanza, it finishes of the poem on a great note!
    Well done!
    love Mel

  • 10 years ago

    by DarkJem

    Excellent poem :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Darien

    Great poem! The rhymes were a bit, confusing. You seemed to have a very unusal rhyme scheme. I have an idea why, but I don't want to give you too much credit yet, since I have never read your poetry before. But I must say I am indeed impressed by this poem. The language and rhetorical devices used were excellent. So this was well done! Keep on writing!

  • 10 years ago

    by Carmen

    Wow... amazing description. its so descriptive, and it rhymed so well. amazing 5/5
    i've only noticed one small grammer mistake. on your last stanza, line 3, "your" should be "you're" or "you are"

  • 10 years ago

    by Amberinaa

    Wow, what else is there to say everyone has said everything ITS AMAZING. The words the flow the rhymes! everything just fits together, it truly is a masterpiece!!

  • 10 years ago

    by Mark

    A good poem and a great flow used in it. Overall, I really liked it.

  • 10 years ago

    by Katlynn

    Wow, this is very beautiful written && very out of the ordinary of writing it so great job.

    keep it up. keep on writing. love always && forever. also thanks for commenting my poems means alot to me.

  • 10 years ago

    by Jackie Marie

    Wow. I had images going through my head the whole time I read this!! You did a wonderful job on this and I am definiatly going to give you the 5/5 that you deserve. The flow was perfect.

    >black&&blue

  • 10 years ago

    by all because of him

    This poem is one of the best ive ever read! and ive read thousands! keep up the good work ur doin great!!

  • 10 years ago

    by Shinae

    This is an amazing piece of work. I would be thanking {murder} for encouraging you to put it on as well. The personification throughout the whole thing was amazing - the Chaotic Mind came not only a state but a character. Loved it - will definately be adding you to my favourties list!

  • 10 years ago

    by Amaya

    Wow. I'm speachless. This was a truly amazing poem! Everything rhymed and went together. Excellent work in this poem.

  • 10 years ago

    by Christie

    Wow, love this poem.

    i have found someone that writes like me!! woohoo. four lined stanzas, 8-9 syllables, ryhming - aa,bb.

    love it. xD

    keep writing, 5/5
    xxx