5/5, real good

Wow! I thought this was amazing. Great vocab and flow. 5/5

marcella

Man this one i like. this feeling u
desribe, i know it well. its the evil
that inside me. that dark part of me that i do my best to control.

Wonderful job, it has a sort of intensity and suspense to it. One suggestion is to write it in poetry format

This isn't presented in poetry format because i submitted it on my cell & now my comp won't edit it. not sure what the deal is! i'll probably just re-post. it bugs me that it's just a blob! thanks noni! -beav

Wow! very descriptive..its more like a story to me..but very well done!...

5/5

OOoO chills! i loved it!

Woah I liked it i didnt really understand the whole form of a paragraph thing thou but it was good

I enjoy your work. it has a feeling. an intrigue about it. --jarrod.

Aww, that was really lovely. it was a really good read

much love and many kisses,
bex

Wow.. i absolutely love this poem!! you describe the darkness so well... it really captured me.. .my only suggestion is to many putting some sort of strucutre on it so it can be read with a better flow

I loved this. it was so dramatic and the horror you described was swell! beautifully written, keep up the great job! 5/5

It's got some very nice vocab, but I recommend putting itinto stanzas to make it easier to read. 4/5. nice job!

That was so good i like your style of writing, who cares if it was not in stanzas it was awesome made me not want to go out in the dark lol