It was very very good. I enjoyed it quite a bit. cheers.

"in people rush" this didnt really make to much sence. And make sure that all of the I's are capitalized. I really liked it. I liked the fact that you repeated the first line it reminds the reader of the emotion and a gives them a sence of not fitting in. The first stanza was my favorite the wording was beautiful I think if you change a few of the words in the rest of the poem it would be better but it was still preaty good.

Awww, I love your style. It was really great, Look forward to reading your other poems, 5/5

The passion was felt in your write with the sense of sadness as well. Nicley Done.

sadaddy

Sad love poem...gets me everytime. Really liked it. I could feel your sadness in the last few lines. Well done. Xx Chrissie

Nice poem, 5/5.

Time came to say good bye
My lips were locked for a second
I saw you last time and gone
I was so alone in your city

Excellent writting.

Ray

I know the feeling of being alone in a city, where you don't know anything/anybody. You went there in hopes of finding love but unlike your plane, it never took off. Excellent poem 5/5

This was also beautifully sad. It held so much emotions which you portrayed nicely. Strong and powerful. Very deep. Well done on this nicely penned poem~mel

"I was Searching you"
that is supposed to be "I was [s]earching [for] you"

"I was looking your room window"
that is either supposed to be "I was looking [at] your room window" or "I was looking [into] your room window" or something different.. there are many different word choices that could go there.. it doesnt matter.. but the way you have it, its missing a word

"I was sitting in launching room" that is supposed to be " I was sitting in [the] launching room"

besides those simple mistakes this was a very enjoyable poem.. the flow was off in a couple of places.. but i love the whole "alone in your city" it was a beautiful concept.. it was soo unexpected that you saw this girl on your way home.. a nice touch.. and i love how you repeated alone in your city and then eneded with it.. it really help strengthen your focus point

The repition throughout this poem was great It's sad kind of i really liked it though
nice work

Wow, great poem. the flow was wonderful. sad,but great. very well written. 5/5

~Chelsea~

I kind of found the whole
I was alone in your city...
Doing it repeatedly, kind of annoying.
But then again, I found it... poetic.

You were sitting on the sofa
I was sitting with your dad
Feelings your smiles
I was alone in your city

Talking with your dad
But thinking about you
And wishing to sit with you
I was alone in your home

I didn't like the fact that you used
The word "dad" at the end of each line.
Maybe you could reword it differently?

I was so alone in your city
Now that was sad.

Hmm...
I didn't really understand the gist of this poem.
Although, it WAS well written.
So dear, I guess I'm going to have to give you a 5/5 :]

I found a few mistakes where words could be added to make the flow and to make it sound better.. other then that.. i thought it was great..

I think the lines were sweet and the emotion in it was felt.

Aw...so nice...really enjoyed that! Nice job with images and patterns! Really effective!

I think Hallmark would be proud the lofty feeling of love radiated from almost every line everything was focused on his be there but alone. I would have to say it was one of the most sweetest things I have read in a while. Plot121

Sooooooooooooooooooooo

Beautiful :):):):):):):):)... ilike it very much

You really know how to attract your readers

your poem soo tuoching :):):)....

You are a talented perfect writer don't you ever say good coz you more :):):)....
and.....:):):)...
as i say your poems vey touching keep doing what you doing pal:):):)...

I love the ending. It's such a sweet, but sad poem at the same time!
Good work

Sweet poem. I know how it feels to be with people and yet feel alone. Anyways I really liked this poem. The word choice was great and the flow was pritty good. 5/5

"in people rush"
^ didn't like that line and it didn't rhyme too well with 'bus'
but other than that amazing poem.
i loved how you put it in words, and repeated the line 'alone in your city'
good choice to do so. :]
keep up the great work, hun.