Comments : Another Picture To Burn [Terzanelle]

  • 17 years ago

    by Once an Angel

    Wow hun, I was extremely impressed with this poem, with its flow and format. I was surprised how much I liked it, but I really do. It was brilliant. Nice job hunni.

    ~Tainted~

  • 17 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Wow. this style is complicated. you mastered it nicely. the brackets add a great effect. i loved the wording and the format of this poem. it was just fabulous! a big 5/5.

  • 17 years ago

    by in.need.of.a.lucky.charm

    Wow, i absolutely loved the last verse, i loved this poem all together. a refreshing piece from u! well done hun. 5/5
    Much love and many kisses,
    bex

  • 17 years ago

    by Amberinaa

    Hmmm,
    never seen a poem
    like this before. it's different
    and i loved it!
    great job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Just Lucy

    Omg wow! I loved the style... what is it.. terzenelle? well you have put it so well!! the flow was great and I love your use of words! your a really talented writer Brit! you should publish a book of your poems? I'd buy it!

    xoxo Lucy

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni

    Wow. I really enjoyed this, you have such a talent for writing, keep up the great work.

  • 17 years ago

    by LithiumSacrifice

    Wow. another excellent poem. i love your style of writting. it really brings the reader closer to your work. =]

  • 17 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Wow... a very impressive poem. I loved the way it was written, the vocabulary used and the flow was great! I have to say i loved the style of it, a terzenelle (sp?), hnm... turthfully i can never acctually folow rules in writing a poem. So i really respect people who can, this has a great flow and it all comes togerther wonderuflly. I liked your reptition of this line, "
    Flutter, flutter [fly away into the wind].", i really liked that line. It reminds me of a butterfly... Anywyas a great read, thank you for your comment! Keep writing! xx

  • 17 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    I always found this style hard to write . But you made this poem a masterpiece .

    Running; far from yourself. [[Shh]] nobody knows you have sinned.
    Reality crumbling beneath your feet.
    Flutter, flutter [fly away into the wind].

    Those lines really stuck to me . & I abso-freaking-lutely loved them . & this poem . the repeated effect just made it really strong .
    To put it simply instead of rambling on:

    i`M iN LOVE WiTH THiS POEM (:
    ..__MiNDYY

  • 17 years ago

    by tryinXtoXholdXmyXheadXup

    I was extremely impressed with this poem, with its flow and format. I was surprised how much I liked it, but I really do. It was brilliant.the vocabulary used and the flow was great. great job keep at it,
    nessa

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Heh, burning pictures, why does that sound oh so familiar? Hmm, I guess it's because I've written about it too! Wow Breezy, great minds do think alike! I really liked the imagery in this poem, although it's obvious what is going to happen, it's really neat to see it played out. I've always wondered what the lines in [brackets] meant, and why you did it? Is it to single it out? I'm always confused reading it.

  • 17 years ago

    by Allison

    I really like the style you used when you wrote this poems; what with all the brackets and repeating lines and such. It really gave a lot of emphasis and emotion to the poem. You used great vocabulary, that's good to see. LOVED IT! <3

    5/5!

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaila

    I liked this poem! I think you used some terrific words and I loved the flow and the meaning was good to it was very original

  • 17 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    [[Shh]]= [(Shh)] it just looks cooler personally lol!

    Flutter, flutter [fly away into the wind].= personally, i love that line yet i hate it...although it is kind of hard to explain... Corny yet... true.

    Reality crumbling beneath your feet. = perfect line! I love that.... may i use it in a poem of my own?

    How pessimistic it is; just another picture to burn. = resonating and strong ending. Perfect strength and awesome job! I love that line especially.

    Thought-provoking poem! Great job once again!

    5/5
    ~Stephen White

  • 16 years ago

    by Red Tears Of The Soul

    Well, that was one hell of a poem. From the presentation all the way down to the wording was brilliant. Nicely done ^_^x

  • 16 years ago

    by Seth

    Ok.. the subject of this is something i wish you hadnt had to go through.. but at the same time.. i love this poem. i love the flow and the way you organized it. Good job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Alexandra Jade Brewer

    That was.... amazing, so well written, and I really like that form of poem. My favorite line is How Pessimistic it is; just another picture to burn... that whole line is so true, so powerful and makes you really think. You have a lot of talent. Keep up the amazing work!