This is a really great poem..i like how everything forms together to make a really great poem i give it a 5/5 i cant wait to see new ones.

Wow this is i think a very amazing poem/story.. how did he die do u know? it got me curious...flow-awsome
overall poem- A+++++++ from me =D lol

Okay just kidding about your last poem.. THIS is my favorite :D ... wonderful choice of words... this tells a story... keep up the great work :D

Oh my gosh.

That poem was heartbreaking. It left the reader wanting more through the entire thing & the mystery was solved when you got to the end. Terribly sad. If this poem was true, I am very sorry for your loss & I'll always be here to talk. 5/5 Keep writing.

Stephanie Lynn .+.

This was a very touching poem, so sad. Some of the lines were a little too long for the rhythmn but overall its a great poem, nice choice of words. 5/5

This was a very touching poem, so sad. Some of the lines were a little too long for the rhythmn but overall its a great poem, nice choice of words. 5/5

My only suggestion here would be to take out the word 'maybe' in the first stanza. It seems to be corrupting the flow. Other than that, this poem is wonderfully written. You've really made your point clear. Wonderfully written!

This poems emotion was so strong throughout the whole poem i think you did a great job portraying the feelings. very touching. and the word choice was great. 5/5~mel

Awe.. thats so sad. =[ i would fall apart if i lost my dad.. so young. ='[ good writting. your really good. (Y) [x]linds

Wow just wow, this was a very emotional poem, I had tears in my eyes. Very nicely pened, you are very talented at writting, keep it up.

Peace, Joe

Very good poem, I really enjoyed it, Great work, 5/5.

Wow, really nice use of words, I could just picture it in my head,

""Where's daddy?"
"Where's he at?"
She sobbed and couldn't find,
an explanation for that."

This is so touching...I'm sorry for you, great poem...

Hey, This is a really said and emotional peace of writing. I noticed oyur name is Kaila, so if this is what happened to you i truly am sorry and if you need to talk im hear for you. PM me anytime.
Anyways i really like this story thats read within your words, it's a sad story that i think many people would be able to relate to... And its a story that can kinda be true for loads of girls out their. Youve got this from... a little girls perspective... that makes it even more meional. Even more brilliant read. Keep writing! xx

Oh, this poem almost made me cry, it is so sad......
i feel bad for what happened, but as i said before every step of life is hard and I know how it feels when someone of your own goes away. i been there.
another 5/5 from me.

Wow s poem is full of sadness i was hoping he would be ok at teh end sosad i really found myself drawn in it did its job well done xxx alex xxx

Another excellent poem. 5/5

This had me in tears..it was a good poem.. Just so sad.. And honestly just has been in tears. Like i said before, you have great talant, keep using it for good. Thank you so much for posting this. I needed to read this. =) So far I've rated 5/5 on everything...This one needs 297845289345293485 lol It was fantastic..
~Ally~

This poem brought tears to my eyes.
I don't know how I would deal with something like this, especially at that young of age.

This was a great poem, but sad. It had great emotion, great flow, great rhyme scheme, great everything!

Keep it up.
5/5

Wow, just wow, that was chilling and very sad. I actually have tears in my eyes. The flow was great as well as the structure. Amazing write with so much emotion. You are very talented.

Peace, Joe

Seriosly I have tears welled up in my eyes. that was so sad. the flow was flawless, and the word choice unbelieveably wonderful. You did an excellent job 10 if I could but since I can't 5