Aww wow thats amazingly written and that last part, wow, really strong. well done keep it up xxxxxxxxxx

I'm a little harsh and opinionated, but that's how it is, don't take too much offense. I don't dig rhyming poems, too easy. Another thing, your beat is off. Some lines I'm taking short breaths, other force me to exhale long and take alot of air, it's kind of inconsistant and makes the poem harder to understand.

Mmm, it wasn't your best, but it was not bad at all, continue writing, your messages in your poems, are REALLY good, you just sometimes don't write them accordingly, but being only 14, you have a ways to go. =)
-Ally

III think that this poems really good. I thought it was all rush and roulette...Not russian roulette..Maybe I'm wrong though ahaha.