And from where all our troubles came. = from whence?

I remember going to all the meetings,= I remember going to all of the meetings,

and when talks of war were floating around,= and when talks of war merely floated around,

I was pleased and did not care. = I was pleased and never did care.

I worse the swastika with grace and pride, = I wore the swastika with grace and pride,

would be tearing me world apart = would be tearing this whole world apart

with my faith being torn in two,=with my faith being torn into two,

but I guess that's what's expected,=
but i guess that's just what is expected

Good poem. I was thinking about writing a poem about the Holocaust. Maybe i still will. Great job and awesome meaning. Sad... but i think with the topic, you could have made it a little more sentimental.

5/5
~Stephen White

Really good write, 5.5 forsure, it's really a different topic :) so hats off to you. thx for taking time to read my poem :)

I like this one, but it was kind of hard for me to follow and get the whole meaning. It's very powerful though. Great work.

Interesting... this is certainly written from an unexpected perspective. Some of the phrases are kind of awkward, like "from where all our troubles came," but I can't exactly pinpoint what's off about it. Maybe the "where." Would "from whom" make more sense there? Anyway, maybe the slight awkwardness i'm getting is just from trying to make the idea of your poem fit into the rhyme and meter you've constructed for it. In any case, I think it has some really cool and interesting thoughts behind it - there's a lot to be done with the paradox of two conflicting modes of thought. Very creative idea.

As for the technical aspects, you can fix a few thigns easily by changing "worse" to "wore the swastika," and "me world" to "my world." Also, just evaluate when you're using commas - you have them to finish of every line that isn't a sentence, but I personally don't think you necessarily need them. If you'd put a comma there if this was written out as prose, then keep it, but if it's a continuous thought, don't. It only slows things down.

So, yes! I hope some of that helped. This was a cool idea, good job!

This was an intersting poem. i liked it. the last two lines happened to be my favorites. good luck in the contest.

That was a wonderful poem dear. It flowed nicely and the rhyming was nice.*5/5* Keep up the good work. ^.^

Alyson

Very deep thoughts in this write. Great Job!

So I'm trapped in this cage of confusion,
with my faith being torn in two,
but I guess that's what's expected,
when a Nazi befriends a Jew.

This was very touching
Take Care Cindy

Wow. Really powerful and a great image. This was really well written, I noticed a few sp's , worse my swastika should be wore and when me world should be when my world.

Other than those, awesome poetry, the last line was really written well and came across very powerfully. Loved it.

Take Care - Sole.

This poem was amazing. I`m not kidding when i say this, but this seriously one of the best I`ve read. The topic being so emotional, you still managed to create a entertaining poem. The rhyme flow was excellent. excellent. This is a very different poem then others also, you wrote it from a "nazi"s view.
I love this poem so much.
5/5

Wow, that was amazing, because through the whole thing i was like where is this going and how will it tie together

it was perfect, really reallt great, keep up the good work

I have never read a poem on this site quite like this, I like it a lot. Great imagery, topic, everything. Excellent word choice, fits the poem very well. I look forward to reading more of your poetry!

Wow. this poem is great. nice flow and structure. where did you get the inspiration from. this is so powerful. great work.5/5