Comments : A Lost Soul

  • 10 years ago

    by Wallace

    Votes and comments welcomed.

  • 10 years ago

    by Ruthie

    Hey hey hey! :D thanks so much for the lovely comment.

    I really enjoyed this work man! fantastic job :) particulariy...

    I stutter in confusion
    As my body has been made whole
    For a savior to all
    Has rescued my lost soul

    lovely!!! keep it up! :D check up on me now and then if I don't comment u :) it's just cause I get busy so give me a poke whenever u get a new one in!

    love ruthie

  • 10 years ago

    by Debbie

    "...For am like a ghost
    Who sees but is never seen"

    Trust me, I've had felt the same way before. But I eventually found the Light, as others would say so. =]

    To begin with, I honestly was delighted to read this piece of yours. I loved how well-developed it is and how uplifting and inspiring it can get towards the reader. I suppose it fits in the Life category better, too.
    A joy to read. Thank you for sharing (and for the comment you left on my poem)! Love, Debbie

  • 10 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I was amazed with this poem coming from you wallace. All your poetry is great but this goes beyond. I enjoyed reading this alot. Well done. Keep up the good work~mel

  • 10 years ago

    by Perfection

    Hey this was pretty amazing man you surley do write well.. I liked the structure and the rhyming but the story was also very good...

    good job Wallace =)

  • 10 years ago

    by Lu

    The trees whispered with the winds
    As death exhumed the earth
    Everything perished
    Not a soul left in sight
    ^^^
    Amazing stanza with such impact to the reader!

    Upon reading this poem I had to go take a second look at your age .... wow you have a wonderful talent and incredible knowledge of vocabulary .... for such a young age.
    I also have a son who is 14

    You've penned quite the amazing write here and you had my full attention from beginning to end.
    Well done , looking forward to reading more of your work !
    Take care
    Luanne

  • 10 years ago

    by Gem

    "For I am like a ghost
    Who sees but is never seen"

    Something which a lot of people have experienced so you've touched a lot of hearts really. Especially mine
    Excellent piece
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 10 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    Excellent poem, Loved it. The flow was perfect, great choice of words, and the ending was excellent.

    "My feelings are gone
    My body is mislead
    For I am like a ghost
    Who sees but is never seen"

    I especially loved this stanza! Keep it up! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    What a poem you try to penned here, simply yet beautiful emotions, awesome!

    just my suggestion.

    For I am like a ghost
    Who sees but is never seen

    "For I am like a ghost
    Who sees but never seen."

    anyway, thanks for your nice comment, much appreciated! have a good day keep them coming.

  • 10 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Lovely piece of imagination and then converting it to an amazing poem..loved the way you expressed it.

    all the best and take care

  • 10 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Lovely piece of imagination and then converting it to an amazing poem..loved the way you expressed it.

    all the best and take care

  • 10 years ago

    by Lost Soul 691

    For one so young, you've got magic in your fingers and soul! A beautiful write and flow.

  • 10 years ago

    by Robert

    Wallace, This lost and found poem is good for most but I think you should endevor for something deeper. You can always say to the reader what you feel but to make the reader envoke a certain emotion is more harder and you really need to work at it. My advice to you is write to move your reader. If you can do this then you have a captured audience and in this craft, that can hold the audience for a long time are the ones that can harness the fortune and commissions on gets by being a professional. Take care and check out my work from time to time I will do the same your Friend Plot121.

  • 10 years ago

    by XxSabrinaxX

    Wallace,

    I got lost in yoour words. great work i will always remain in aww.
    later,
    Sabrina
    a.k.a Sweetest Sin

  • 10 years ago

    by Lithium

    Fasntasic work!!! this is written really well, it flows perfectly, well done indeed! xox lithium

  • 10 years ago

    by Fsams

    Wow

    I stutter in confusion
    As my body has been made whole
    For a savior to all
    Has rescued my lost soul

    These lines are awsome Wallace. I loved it very much. Great 5/5 piece

    Tc
    Fsams

  • 10 years ago

    by kitkat girl

    Very, very good poem!!! I like the story form of the poem. and i like the last two lines!!
    peace

  • 10 years ago

    by robin milford

    This poem is awesome

  • 10 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Wow I love your choice of words! I really like your opening line, it was superb! Flow was smooth, Well done

    5/5! all the way

    -Thanks for the comment.

  • 10 years ago

    by Simply Me

    That was beautiful and veryw ell written 5/5 return the love thanks