Song Title Contest #2

Same as the last one...

I've chosen the titles of 20 songs I've listened to today.
Nab a title (so no one else takes it) and get writing - you know how this works!

.Titles.
1. Forsaken
2. Who Will Save Your Soul? `AwingAshes`
3. Close to Insanity `Forever Waiting`
4. Between the Shadows `Lady Nik`
5. Now We Are Free `Courageous Dreamer`
6. Tears in Heaven
7. Misty Mountain Hop `Nicko`
8. Darker Side `morgan`
9. Cherry Red Wine
10. Call Me the Breeze
11. End of the Road `Kurt`
12. Wicked Games `Pure Bride`
13. Call Me a Dog
14. Psychotic Girl `standingUP4our failure`
15. Vertigo
16. So Far From Your Weapon
17. Night Terror `Luna Blue`
18. The Downward Spiral
19. It Stoned Me
20. Beast of Burden `the Riddler`

.Guidelines.
-Must be at least 12 lines
-Any style poem is fine, rhyming or rhyme-less
-The subject matter is open
-Claim a title, then begin writing

.Awards.
-3rd place- 1 rating & 1 comment
-2nd place- 3 ratings & 3 comments
-1st place- 5 ratings & 5 comments

*The contest will close when 10 poems have been submitted*

I will take Now We Are Free :]
I'm glad youre bringing this back again.

I will take "Wicked Games" please and thank you....

~MaryAnne

Can I have Close To Insanity please. Thank you!

I'll take End of the Road. Please and thank you.

-Who Will Save Your Soul-
I really don't know the song...but the title was interesting.
This is a poem I've written earlier; thought it fit the part.
It's kinda wordy, I have a problem with getting to the point.

Save Me.

I can hear their silent screams
pleading for rescue
away from this dirty Earth,
where they are begging to be saved.

No one can hear them
because no one really knows,
what they have to face
on a day to day basis.

No one really knows
how bad society has changed --
only those children,
who are begging to be saved.

No one really knows
that the kids are in danger,
as they are left to be victims
of the filthiness that is this world.

Everyone thinks their kids are naive
swinging at the playground,
playing with new friends
little do they know,
the playground is not as it seems.

As the new friends they meet,
introduce "cooler" things
in which they will forget themselves
all in wanting to fit in.

Where their minds will control them
their hearts overruled,
where their brains will lead them
in the game of wanting to be cool.

Everything has changed
as you now think your naive child
has become a monster;
a criminal.

A child no more, it seems to me you think,
wondering what snatched their innocence.
This young adolescent continues to drown
in self control and consciousness.

And you stand there and watch
this monster fall deeper into that hole
as you continue to think,
that they'll climb right out;
without support.

This hole they're digging, that child of yours,
is merely a grave,
that I shall remind you
that you, yourself, helped create.

And you stood there,
watching your child transform
from the angelic kid at the playground
to the monster that you helped create
and destroy.

And you stood there,
hearing their silent screams
pleading for rescue
away from that agonizing hole,
away from that unstoppable brain control.

Do you hear them?
Their terrifying shrieks.
Their helpless moans.
"Save me," they're yelling.

Why are you just standing there?
Who will save our souls?

^ Nice write.

Alrighty, poems claimed.
If you take too long to submit your poem or do not keep me slightly up to date with its status, I may give the title to someone else. Meanwhile, I'll hold all claimed titles safe for 1 week.

Can I have the "darker side" please

Misty Mountain Hop....is mine all mine, or you'll get a bit of Led...

Between The Shadows please

Psychotic Girl for me please :)

Beast Of Burden plz

Between The Shadows

Between the shadows
rest a place where I find
you always. Here and there
no matter the day, I know you'll
be everywhere. Darkness is not
always the root of evil, seed of
sin. The place I met love,
the place where we begin.

Behind the sun
Lies the thoughts of you,
my dearest love that feels so true.
Trickling down the faucet is
the time I spent in this solitary
mind shaft waiting for your return.
My sweet I'm happy you've come back.

Next to mountain tops
is where I slept in your arms.
Nearly close to heaven where
I felt no kind of harm.
I'm blessed through you my
angel. Your wings of faith
cover me and fuel my great escape.

Near riverbanks
stands the first viewing of
the light shinning off your brown hair.
Perfectly sketched in my memory
erase such a picture, I'd never dare.
Years with you have made me see
the greatest parts of life
aren't always a mystery.

Over the half moon
stares a pair of eyes
I'd know in the darkest room.
I've been hurt too much and
you're love didn't come too soon.
You make me feel different
like I could laugh through the hurt.
You're the best thing in the universe
the one I deserve.

Opposite green plains
stays the moments I share with you,
the love I feel, the heart that beats,
the you and me. Even with
death around the corner, I'll never let go.
Just remember, love, that we have
our sacred place hidden
between the shadows.

Psychotic Girl

She's such a mistake.
a rebel.
resisting the world.
refusing to get in line.

speaking her mind.
spitting insane ideas for the masses to hear.
she'll ruin everything!
shut this girl up!

lock her away,
make her think she's gone mad,
break her down.
take her spirit and throw it out.

what a psychotic girl,
thinking freely,
standing out.

That's 3 in the bag.

Beast Of Burden

Painted scenery by my blood
This feeling has never faded
This beast of burden asks you
Is his heart ever true

Touched by the stars
Changed forever by the scars
The soul masked by his sin
A monster underneath the skin

The curse follows wherever I am
No longer the innocent lamb
I dream a day where I am like all the others
When this beast of burden is with his brothers

Cool. 5 to go. I do know what starfruits and durians are. Durians smell gross :) haha

Now We Are Free.

Ominous clouds of charcoal
loomed overhead fragmenting
faith into shards, as exhausted
dreams started to suffocate,
they dwindled.

Metal chains anchored us
stagnant to a concrete
ground of depression,
spiraling into thoughts
stained by death's
pigmentation...

Brutally battered with torrential
downpours of nightmares,
the end lingered at our fingertips,
and fear punctured our souls,
yet hope resurfaced in time,
and we broke through
confining bars of hardship...

and now we are free.

Misty Mountain Hop

Over the misty mountain hopped Bilbo
He asked Zep if he would go
Get down in the streets today baby
Cause he hadn't been there lately

People with flowers in their hair said hey
Why the hell don't you stay
Hang awhile
This kinda made me smile

But if you go you better open your eyes
Ingesting drugs won't be wise
So you better get in line
Drink that cup of wine

Stay for tea and have some fun
Before hopping into the sun
You know it's all a state of mind
Atop that hill, what will you find

Decided what I'm gonna do
I'm gonna come with you
Where the spirits fly
I'm gonna get high

Over the misty mountain!

(Robert Plant is an avid reader, and Tolkien one of his favourite Authors)

3 more!

(So) Close To Insanity ~ Kim

I spoke but no one listened
I cried but no one noticed
But that girl is fading away
I don't think that she'll be missed

Now I'm so close to insanity
I can feel it creeping up on me
It's pulsing through my veins
Slowly burning me, burning
It's seeping into my mind
Slowly turning me, turning
Well I'm so close to insanity
It's tearing apart who I used to be

When I yelled and screamed out
No one ever heard my shouts
But I'm not bitter, no I'm not
Because that girl's turned to rot

Now I'm so close to insanity
That I can feel it touching me
It's pushing away my heart
Slowly killing me, killing
It's taking over my mind
Slowly filling me, filling
Well I'm so close to insanity
I can feel it... it's killing me

2 more and we're done.

Wicked Games

I am but a subtle winged spirit
crafted by fatherly hands;
I was made anew in paradise
before you prowled along,
like the dominant alpha.
My mind was set open,
able to be penetrated, vulnerable.
You took hold of right judgment,
crushing it with your thoughts.

I used to see the fiery sun
dance into the morning;
But then midnight shadows
crawled into the dawning,
and scooped away its heart.
Freedom stood on the edge,
teasing me with fantasies, intriguing.
I had to creep across cracks,
only to be flung off a cliff.

I am now but a stretched and
fatigued grey rose;
For you have played freely
with my withered heart,
and it is on life support.
I was a naive child, setting your traps,
digging deeper your underground jail.
My soul cannot be livened,
I am destined to be a prisoner forever.

1 more! Better get it in quick if you want to get it in at all ;)

End of the Road

Life is so simply complicated
Souls, bodies, minds; all mashed into one
Separate ideals yet related

Grasp at the daylight, reach for the sun
Smile brightly to begin each day
Socialize with friends, speak out for fun

Care for strangers, console their dismay
Thank for laughter, and kindness bestowed
Appreciate the people who stay

Remember the gratitude you owed
Knowledge is power, so study well
Pass the test at the end of the road

©Kurt Hampton 2009

Cool. Contest closed. I'm going to bed but I'll judge this tomorrow.

Alright. This has been another tough contest to judge, but here we are:

.1st. Wicked Games by Pure Bride
.2nd. Now We Are Free by Courageous Dreamer
.3rd. Between the Shadows by Lady Nik

AwingAshes, although your poem has an important point, I felt that the point could be wrapped up in one sentence - If you don't teach your kids right and wrong, you're as much the culprit as anyone else if they turn out badly.

standingUP4our failure, cool dark idea for your poem, but it lacks depth or any intricacy/detail.

the Riddler, although you took your poem in an interesting direction, it lacks depth. The poem is about a burdened beast... the same exact thing could be interpreted from just the 3 word title: Beast of Burden.

Luna Blue, I can tell someone knows how to use a thesaurus ;) You have to find a balance between great words and making sure your poem has meaning and a direction. I must give you props for the excellent vocabulary, but don't let the words be your master! Be master of the words.

Nicko, your poem too closely reflects the actual song by Led Zepp. Although it's a great song, I wanted you to take the title and run with it... not run with the lyrics.

Crimson Regret, you nearly placed 3rd because it seems you put a degree of energy into the poem and it comes out pleasantly song-like. However, the poem also comes off as another mainstream version of teen angst.

Kurt, while your poem is honest and true to the bone, it's surprisingly bland.

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Sorry for the harsh critiques. I only have so much time and I feel it's better to focus on why you didn't win this contest rather than sugar-coating the loss with compliments.
However, good writes all of them and I hope to see more of your poetry in the next contest!

I'll give out awards later tonight or tomorrow.

Congrats winners.

Thank you for the placing & well done everyone else & congrats to the other winners. thanks for taking the time to host this

Thanks for the opportunity to compete. Congrats to all winners.

Thank you :) and congrats everyone

Thank you so much for the placing, this was very unexpected and I appreciate your time.

Congrats to all the rest!

God bless you!

~MaryAnne

Yes you're right Jane it was about the lyrics and probably one of the crappist poems I've written, but I had fun with it but felt obliged to include some of Led Zep in there

Congratulations to the winners.....

I appreciate everyone's participation! Holding a contest requires some amount of work & perseverance ;) it's not all fun & games!

Going to give out awards now.
Ah, I'm sorry. I have a headache. Pure Bride, I have 2 more poems to R/R/C for you and 2nd & 3rd place, I have yet to give you your awards. I'll get to it soon, promise.

Take your time, I appreciate all that you have done so far. I have really learned much from your comments and I thank you for your thoughts..

~MaryAnne

Call Me the Breeze

You run with doubt never thinking , never knowing,
You smile with laughter, you smile with tears without shifting,
The beauty that is you, so open I can never feel blue,
Noticing my heart jumps , when I say that its you,
Call me the breeze , i'll make you freeze,

Freeze in the cold, feel in the love that is so sold,
I know you want it, I know that you adore it,
Crushing mindless ideas only for one that is us,
Not caring , not fearing just like a painters brush,
Yeah sweet like honey , exciting you know its not a curse,
Call me the breeze, I will make you squeeze,

Squeeze the endless love , from your adoring lips,
Shifting the gears of pleasure that make you feel sweet,
From my gaze to your heart, from your gaze like a snack,
I eat you up, I fill you up, you rock my boat, and its not a thought,
Call me the breeze , the sweet soothing wind.

Lol