Comments : Insidious Malice

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Another super write, Cassie. I will try and remember to come back to this one and comment more fully, but my mind is - at least for tonight - slowly ebbing aw.........

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Another great piece.
    Take care Cindy

  • 8 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    I see this as an expression of depression and loss. The hollowness of a sad creature whose life has left her behind. She is a ghost in her own world. Some have left her permanently, no longer among the living. Others, perhaps more painfully, have left her forsaking love's promise.
    In this entire poem there is not a shred of hope. So consistently depressing that the reader wants to reach out, touch her on the shoulder and give comfort. The question is whether such a gesture would even be recognized.

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Congratulations on your win!
    Take care Cindy

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Well done on this win, Cassie - couldn't be happier for you.
    All the best,
    Ben

  • 8 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Where loves light should have been

    - in this line, the light belonging to love means loves should be love's with an apostrophe.

    What a fantastic poem, really powerful and the flow you have captured is amazing, the rhyme and subtle beat behind the words is great, really enjoyable to read.

    you have really expressed the pain of sadness deep in this poem, and portrayed the depth of a hollow feeling that feels full of pain.

    Congratulations that this won, I can see why.