Comments : Vacation Retreat (Ottava rima)

  • 9 years ago

    by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-

    Where my dear love will never have to depart,
    ^That part brought memories for me since I can't let go I'm like a dog with a bone in that department beautiful

    Our spirit's longed for the point of lessons learned.
    ^ that's another line that caught my attention it's quite nice to read and it's true the life we lead will take us to different journey and with that we get new lessons every day.

    keep writing :) 5/5

    -Bet

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    This really is a beautiful poem. The rhymes were outstanding I feel overall. I think in our hearts we all want to go to a place like this. Where we can all live in peace and free from war or hatred. I also loved your love line, as we never want to lose our loves. I believe the title fits perfectly because the place you describe is like a "vacation" of sorts. Only this place you never have to leave. I think you might be talking about heaven which is a paradise. There is a very relaxing feeling I get from this. Great write!