Comments : Time is an hourglass

  • 8 years ago

    by Liz

    There's something about this......not sure what it is, but I like it a lot. Makes me sad, but hopeful.

    Just a few things- third line: "pass me bye. "Bye" should be "by".
    "Losing feet by the grand".. did you mean "grain", grand kind of doesn't make sense to me there.
    Also, the line before "via a glass" , just an opinion- I think it would flow easier without the "a" and just let it say "via glass".

    Other than that, I thoroughly enjoyed the poem.

    • 8 years ago

      by HumanInATree

      Thank you I missed those few errors "bye" and "grand" when I published it. On the other hand I kind of like the via a glass part ill think about changing it or write a part two. Nevertheless thank you for the complements and I feel the same way about this pome. It sits with me in an uncanny way but I still see its power.