Comments : Lotus Blossom (haiku)

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    There is so much you can say about this one too! First of all the title is perfect to me because in the poem you are talking about the subject of the flower. Amyway. The use of young is great because thst tells me the flower is just blooming after wilting because of the winter cold. I loved the wording you used in the first two lines because flowers are very gentle and the use of "young" and "softly" connect well to the gentleness of the flower and poem overall. As I said I see this flower just blooming and coming to life. So that tells me that spring is here and your last line proves this to be true. Anyways. The lines connect so well as a story. Well done

  • 10 years ago

    by Hellon

    Young lotus blossom
    softly opening to life,
    gone are winter days

    I really love you first two lines in this haiku...you describe this flower so well in them. I feel, in the third line you could have said so much more...hinted at the symbolism of this flower for example..what colour it was maybe because each colour has a different meaning I think. Gone are winter days is ok I guess but, I was just a little let down by it and wanted more.

    I think you could give this a slight tweak and it would improve it 10 fold....still, I did enjoy it as is anyway :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    I love it

  • 9 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Beautiful Haiku by Baby Rainbow!!!
    Haiku's are the most elegant, small formed nature poems in my opinion and I am truly impressed with this poem.
    The message is the grand introduction to spring and the lotus blossom opens up, leaving winter behind (another chapter is born)
    Tons of detail in each line. Just a gorgeous haiku by this author, I really love it!!