Comments : All Is Lost

  • 9 years ago

    by Lemma

    So sweet and sad. Great rhyming that didn't feel at all forced.

    "I wish there was a way to show.
    I'm holding on won't let you go."

    My favourite lines, just really sweet and sincere. Love the ending aswell. I know I'm nit-picking but it's "death do us part." =)

    Beautiful write,

    5/5

    Em xXx

  • 9 years ago

    by nering

    ....breathtaking--amazing how i can relate minus ill be the wife. How i still hold on and its been a year. This poem is so heartfelt and pure...great job!

  • 9 years ago

    by Connie

    I think you did a great job on this one (even tho I believe it was a tough one for ya). Good Job!

  • 9 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    Awe. very beautifully written. the flow only broke in 2 spots. but besides that, this piece was amazing. :] I can feel the intensity of your emotions. :] great write. 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Wallace

    A good poem, it had a nice flow and good emotions but the flow wasnt on the whole way. And I dont know why you have full stops at the end of each line it makes it seem as if you're starting over again line after line. A nice poem but it didnt have that wow factor so I give it a 4/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Roses and lilys

    Nice poem, I'm sure that alot of people can relate to this poem in one way or another. It has a nice flow and good word choice. Also you used some nice rhyming. I give it a 5/5