Excellent. I really liked the repitition of the word Surrender I thought it really made an impact on the poem. This was a short poem but it had an excellent start and a perfect finish. 5/5

This is a great poem... you stuck to the topic and didnt go off track like some people tend to do... in my own personal opinion i think if you made it longer it would definately be more powerful... its great the way it is though.

5/5 from me.

I like the length. It makes it more powerful and emphatic; tends to make all the words and ideas stick in my head. I really liked the last two lines a lot. Well done. 5/5.

Hmm. The ending was good, but the beginning was really strong and the first four lines were my favorite. :] This piece was very well flowing and it's short but has a lot of meaning. 5/5.

Wonderful.
maybe try to use some fancier diction.
it could make it better, however it is already wonderful