Comments : Black water

  • 10 years ago

    by firexdancer

    Now that was gorgeous.
    That's the first poem I've seen written in that style, and for this poem it really worked, it makes every single word/sentence really reach you, so that you absorb the entire poem, not just fragments of it.
    That was purely beautiful.
    I have to add it to my favorites now.

  • 10 years ago

    by devils angel sunrise

    Well gabby you did good this paints a picture of its own well done

    and if you ever even think about jumping of a cliff well i think you know what id do

  • 10 years ago

    by Curing the Comon Cliche

    Teddie, is this a certian meaning impliing a certian cliff in a certian poem about a certian panda?

    if not then bravo

    i love it btw, very amaziong

  • 10 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Great poem... very expressive...

    good work..

  • 10 years ago

    by RB

    That gave me chills reading it. i loved how you said just a few words in every rly added to the overall affect of the poem. brilliant! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Amber

    Whoa like gave me shivers I thought the girl was goign to jump for a minute so i was all tense but relaxed when i read she didn't
    Good Job.

  • 10 years ago

    by Internal Hatred


  • 10 years ago

    by J u l e s

    This is such a good poem, i was actually able to make a picture out in my head of this happening. everything just worked together <333

  • 10 years ago

    by Niels can I possibly write a comment right now when I'm still shocked by one of the best poems I've ever seen!

    This poem is full of tension and so dark that I could see it in my head, like pictures!!

    Awesome job! Keep writing!!

  • 10 years ago

    by LoveBird99

    Wow! I love the imagery, and I can really relate to the depression ans darkness described

  • 10 years ago

    by Alvaro

    I have to say i love your poems your flow.. is... just.. peaceful.. gentle.. as if im lookin at waves.. in my head.. literally speechless =] loved it 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Wereallbladesarntwe

    "A blood red rose floats away on black water?" a beautiful image, i love that, well done mate, x P

  • 10 years ago

    by Lauren Crandall

    I liked the bluntness of this poem, which is very odd considering normally i hate short adjectives and such.
    in this case however i really loved the choppy nature that followed the story.

    However, i thought the story could have had more depth; as it was slightly boring, and didn't have enough emotion as i would have liked.