Comments : Black water

  • 9 years ago

    by firexdancer

    Wow.
    Now that was gorgeous.
    Absolutely.
    That's the first poem I've seen written in that style, and for this poem it really worked, it makes every single word/sentence really reach you, so that you absorb the entire poem, not just fragments of it.
    That was purely beautiful.
    I have to add it to my favorites now.
    5/5
    ~gabriella

  • 9 years ago

    by devils angel sunrise

    Well gabby you did good this paints a picture of its own well done

    and if you ever even think about jumping of a cliff well i think you know what id do

  • 9 years ago

    by Curing the Comon Cliche

    Teddie, is this a certian meaning impliing a certian cliff in a certian poem about a certian panda?

    if not then bravo

    i love it btw, very amaziong

  • 9 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Great poem... very expressive...

    good work..

  • 9 years ago

    by RB

    That gave me chills reading it. i loved how you said just a few words in every line..it rly added to the overall affect of the poem. brilliant! 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Amber

    Whoa like gave me shivers I thought the girl was goign to jump for a minute so i was all tense but relaxed when i read she didn't
    Good Job.

  • 9 years ago

    by Internal Hatred

    Amazing.

  • 9 years ago

    by J u l e s

    This is such a good poem, i was actually able to make a picture out in my head of this happening. everything just worked together <333

  • 9 years ago

    by Niels

    .....how can I possibly write a comment right now when I'm still shocked by one of the best poems I've ever seen!

    This poem is full of tension and so dark that I could see it in my head, like pictures!!

    Awesome job! Keep writing!!

  • 9 years ago

    by LoveBird99

    Wow! I love the imagery, and I can really relate to the depression ans darkness described

  • 9 years ago

    by Alvaro

    I have to say i love your poems your flow.. is... just.. peaceful.. gentle.. as if im lookin at waves.. in my head.. literally speechless =] loved it 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Wereallbladesarntwe

    "A blood red rose floats away on black water?" a beautiful image, i love that, well done mate, x P

  • 9 years ago

    by Lauren Crandall

    I liked the bluntness of this poem, which is very odd considering normally i hate short adjectives and such.
    in this case however i really loved the choppy nature that followed the story.

    However, i thought the story could have had more depth; as it was slightly boring, and didn't have enough emotion as i would have liked.

    xx:Lauren