Comments : Whisper

  • 9 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    Aw cute cute cute!! i loved it i mean it was prefecectly worded and the rhymed pulled it together 5/5 hope it lasts : )

  • 9 years ago

    by Blissful

    Guide me throughout this whole week,
    For without you I am very weak.

    The use of "weak" and "week" threw the flow off for me. Other than that this was an amazing piece that just filled me with love. The emotions were real and true. The flow was flawless until the last two lines. Well done *5/5*

  • 9 years ago

    by Coreena Kromer

    Very nice poem, emotions well stated.

  • 9 years ago

    by Teria

    This poem has such an amazing flow and rhythm to it, I absolutely love that.

    It was small, and it somehow seemed there could be more to it, but at the same time there couldn't. More as if there's something hidden that won't be let out? Even though, I'm sure that's not the case with this. Maybe there was just a little lack of emotion or something in the middle of the poem.

    I'm not quite sure, but it's an amazing poem and you surely deserve a 5/5 on it. (:

    Keep it up, dear.

  • 9 years ago

    by your love is mine

    Aw cute poem really liked it i really do.=)

  • 9 years ago

    by Roses and lilys

    I loved it. It was a great read and easy to relate to. It had a nice flow and great word choice. I gave it a 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Unamed

    Aww!.it's really beautiful!!!..i love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.......i want my guy to whisper in my ear!!...aww...i can totaly feel ur emotion......keep writting.ur great at it!
    *******aLy********

  • 9 years ago

    by Still Slightly Broken

    So perfectly written.
    i love this so much.
    5/5
    keep it up.
    kelsey xx

  • 9 years ago

    by Insanity

    Amazing bravo. It was a great read and I enjoyed it emensly. Keep it going.

  • 9 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    Keep me in your thoughts and prayers,
    `I feel like there should be another word in that line to make the beginning flow better.

    Say that I'm the key to your door,
    `It sounds better to me when I replace it with "I am" instead of "I'm."

    Guide me throughout this whole week,
    For without you I am very weak.
    `That rhyme just ruined it for me -- and it makes for a weak ending, and in such a short poem, it kind of smashes it for me.

    Overall, I feel like it's emotional, but the word choice and diction isn't quite as strong. Again, work a little with your syllabication.

    ..__MiNDYY

  • 9 years ago

    by Megan

    I like this poem. It's so cute. But has a true meaning. =]]

  • 9 years ago

    by Nikki

    I like it

  • 9 years ago

    by reJoyce

    Simple and too the point, my desired style. good use of the word whisper and i long for the same from my loved one. keep writing.

  • 9 years ago

    by ile

    I really like this one. i could really understand how you felt.
    i hope i can write as good as you one day.

    keep it up!

  • 9 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    Awe, a very beatiful write. I can relate to it a lot. And there's definitely a lot of emotions in this piece that you expressed clearly and deeply. A heartfelt write, an enjoyable read. 5/5.

  • 9 years ago

    by 0oAshleyo0

    I really like this poem... its sweet and caring...
    the only thing i thought could be better is the stanza

    "Keep me in your thoughts and prayers,
    Since I know how much you care."

    it would sound better to me if it said somethinng like "let me know how much you care"
    the "since" kinda throws it off for me...

    But altogether a good job... :)

    XxAshleyxX

  • 9 years ago

    by LukesAngel

    This is really sweet :)

  • 9 years ago

    by BluEyedMemory

    I loved this poem. I know the feeling of wishing for someone to say those words... I just felt the poem. Every emotion...
    Great Write
    Emma 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by abullettotheheart

    This is quite amazing
    i love it :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Still Slightly Broken

    Very beautiful.

    I loved it.

    5/5

    Great work :)

    xx