Comments : Sun rises Tomorrow

  • 9 years ago

    by Kalee

    This is a really beautiful poem David. it is very clear that you love this lucky girl a lot. a wonderful poem. 5/5

    Kalee

  • 9 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    David,

    What a beautiful tribute to your muse:)
    I love your romantic soul.

    Love, always

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 9 years ago

    by Lu

    If the sun rises tomorrow,
    I'd tell you over and over again
    That you're my girl and I'll try
    With my whole heart,
    Every breath I take, every pounding beat
    I love you so much
    ^^^
    Your ink has penned the beating of your heart with lines of love and beauty.

    I hope the sun rises tomorrow
    So I can see you once more
    Laying beside me, asleep in my arms
    ^^^
    One of love's greatest wishes.

    With if no sun rises tomorrow?
    The missed opportunity to be kissed by you
    To be held closely by you,
    Already my heart aches for you,
    Longs to be with you, the pain becoming stronger each minute
    I love you so much
    ^^^
    I think in your first line you mean ...
    "What if no sun rises tomorrow?"

    I like how you ending the first and last stanza the same. The depth of your love is so very evident in this piece and the hope so very profound.
    Nice read
    Luanne

  • 9 years ago

    by Cindy

    David
    A very loving and sweet poem. Your love can be felt in this piece.
    Good job!
    Take Care Cindy

  • 9 years ago

    by Elapsed

    A very romantic piece for your girly, which came from the heart.. beautiful!

  • 9 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    I really felt to the point that I almost cried, honestly. It was a touching and deep. piece.

  • 9 years ago

    by CrazyCowLady

    I love this so much
    But makes me sad because i know you will never feel this way about me
    My favourite lines are:
    I hope the sun rises tomorrow
    So I can see you once more
    Laying beside me, asleep in my arms
    It really touches my heart

    Hannah 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Another good poem.. but i didnt feel like the ending was as strong as it could have been but it was an okay ending. i was just expecting more.. but other than that you did a great job with expressing your emotions for this girl. nice job. 5/5