Perfect Harmony (Collab)

by Sherry Lynn   Apr 14, 2008


A vivid blue sky,
Wind calm as can be.
The suns beating down
Against you and me.

The kids are all playing
In the hot soft sand,
While the waves are breaking
Creating a beautiful song.

Birds continue chirping,
Perfect harmony,
As though to sing a melody
Created just for you and me.

Time briefly frozen,
As our memories are etched.
Embedded forever,
And carved in our beating chest.

My prayers have been answered,
There is nothing more to want.
Your love will continue
To forever carry me on.

© Copyright 2008 By: Sherry Lynn and Italian Stallion

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Collaboration with Italian Stallion

Italian Stallion: http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/author.html?id=144412
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  • 5 years ago

    by Amreen

    What a peaceful write sherry.... I am too at perfect harmony after reading this...!! It has created such a beautiful imagery afore me which as if that is what a person always want.... You did perfect justice with the title.... Wish you write more as I amn't getting a chance to read your latest but it is a delight to read and express about your old ones...:)

    A vivid blue sky,
    Wind calm as can be.
    The suns beating down
    Against you and me.

    ^^
    What a start..! It builds a picture for me which persists till the end of the poem... it has great a potential...

    The kids are all playing
    In the hot soft sand,
    While the waves are breaking
    Creating a beautiful song.

    ^^
    This verse reminds me of the songs of 70s of India which used to be so calm and soothing and brings a smile on our face... just beautiful!

    Birds continue chirping,
    Perfect harmony,
    As though to sing a melody
    Created just for you and me.

    ^^
    So romantic... Just a perfect verse for depicting the scene for two lovely people in love...

    Time briefly frozen,
    As our memories are etched.
    Embedded forever,
    And carved in our beating chest.

    ^^^
    Superb part... I hope lovely moments remain there forever...

    My prayers have been answered,
    There is nothing more to want.
    Your love will continue
    To forever carry me on.

    ^^
    Just a beautiful end... showcases the desires of two love birds to be nested forever on a tree of love... just beautiful:)

    5/5 sweets
    Love
    Amreen

  • 6 years ago

    by Pink Butterfly

    This is totally sweet.... I felt at peace while reading... Good job for this!!!! God bless you!

    -Pink Butterfly-

  • 9 years ago

    by Sourav

    I loved the every stanza of it. This one is so perfectly written. A flawless write. Great poem!

  • 9 years ago

    by C P Sharma

    It seems to be spontaneou overflow of feelings within with a perfect tuning with beats of your heart and perfect choice of words and imagery. I would add:

    I don’t want any more of charm,
    Than your love for ever swarm,
    I always be in your arm,
    None can ever do me harm,
    Time’s clock we can disarm..

  • 9 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    In the second and last stanza you guys did not stick to the rhyme scheme. The flow was off and the poem contains forced rhyming. You are trying to convey a tranquil, loving scene but I think you guys could have done a much better job.