Comments : My Offer

  • 11 years ago

    by Cindy

    Bill
    I have missed reading your work. What a very touching poem you have penned.

    You are the only one to ever reach me
    Touching my soul in ways never dreamed
    Your loving touch forever taking care of me

    These lines toched my heart. What a wonderful feeling when you find your soulmate. Just seeing them or feeling their touch gives you the comfort you can't get from anyother.

    When the darkness creeps into my head
    You are always there keeping the demons away
    Even the night I feared I would end up dead

    This is such heartfelt lines. How scary to think you are dying. Having the one you love by your side can sometomes make you stronger and fight harder.

    Great job!
    ((Hugs))
    Cindy

  • 11 years ago

    by Lu

    You are the only one to ever reach me
    Touching my soul in ways never dreamed
    Your loving touch forever taking care of me
    ^^^
    Bill this stanza is beyond even beautiful .... it is the truest of true words whispered from your heart.
    They are such touching words ....

    When the darkness creeps into my head
    You are always there keeping the demons away
    Even the night I feared I would end up dead
    ^^^
    Isn't it so true ... that is the one we love who holds us together when we are falling apart. When darkness or illness comes, it is them that is our savior

    I long to spend an eternity in your life
    Giving to you all that I possibly can
    Ensuring that you are the happiest wife
    ^^^
    Happy wife .... Happy life ... lol ... I just had to say that because Darryll always says that as a joke.
    But on a serious note: This stanza just speaks love and all the beauties that come with opening up your heart and giving all you can ....

    For you have given me a life worth living
    Passion, tenderness and love
    I offer my love that I will forever be giving
    ^^^
    Beautiful ending Bro ...

    This entire piece just flows with love .... ~wipes tear~ and it is a beautifully woven piece, knitted together by the beauty and love that lays within your heart.

    ~Big hugs~ Bro ....
    Sis