Comments : Promise Me This

  • 9 years ago

    by Lu

    Deana
    This such a beautifully woven piece.

    Lie with me beneath the sky
    Count the stars that share the night
    Bathe in streams, from mountains fall
    Hear with me, the night birds call
    ^^^
    The imagery sweeps into my heart and bathes me in the tranquility of whispered promises of forever.

    I love you began the poem with the two couplets and then ended it with the same two couplets.

    Beautifully penned Deana and such a mesmerizing read.
    Excellent!
    Luanne

  • 9 years ago

    by Cindy

    Deana
    I'm not good at breaking down things in a poem, But I know what I like when I read it. This is a poem that stays with you long after you read it. One you would like to get lost in over and over.

    Touch only, with gentle hands
    Walk with me on morning sand
    Dreams that linger in the heart
    A bond that life can't tear apart

    This kind of love is a rare find. One everyone wishes for. It brings so many wonderful memories back to me. For I was lucky to have found a true love.

    Build a fire within my soul
    Create a love story yet untold
    Hold my hand and walk with me
    Into the realm, eternity

    This brought a tear to my eye. Waiting for that eternity.

    Whisper my name upon a kiss
    Forever my love ,promise me this

    Forever....this is such a beautiful piece Deana. Congrsts on the win in the title challenge :)
    Excellent!
    ~Clapping~
    Love Cindy

  • 9 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Deana,

    I love how you wrote this, such a gentle and sweet love poem.....
    I will add it to my favorite poems:)

    Hugs,

    Ingrid

  • 9 years ago

    by Jess

    This is such a cute poem. 5/5 keep up the excellent work my friend

    xoxoxox
    Jess

  • 9 years ago

    by your love is mine

    Aww this poem is really good really liked it.=)

  • 9 years ago

    by ashley joy

    I thought it was very touching and beautiful. The words really flowed like you ment every word and like it came from somewhere deep in your soul. If you really have found love hold on to it.

  • 9 years ago

    by XxBAYBiiGiRLxX

    Very beatiful poem full of emotion loved it 5/5!
    xoxo

  • 9 years ago

    by H E Losey

    A very well construted write, though it threw me upon first reading. Once realized I enjoyed your rhyme scheme and the mental images portrayed were gripping.

  • 9 years ago

    by Kaetaj

    The rythm was wonderful and it was nice; keep it up!

  • 9 years ago

    by Sourav

    The description is so beautiful and gorgeous! The imagery is perfect. A pleasure to read!

  • 9 years ago

    by MARI

    Awawa this is a really great poem good job!!!