In the ending part you should put weren't happy here... wasn't doesn't really make sense but your poem is a 100% true!! Its over nothing really..

I reallt liked this i loved it so much like i told you already!!!:D great job!!

It reminded me of that song by Bob Dyland - Hurricane. The rhythm of that matches the song, other than that, brilliant piece =)

The poem is interesting,u drew a picture n my mind...And ur message is great ..I enjoyed reading it..
Keep up the good work..

The peom flows well. it's really deep

This paints a good picture in your head, it's unique and overall a good poem. good job. =]

It's been a while. You bring reality into this poem. It reminds me of the crime and problems of our society. 5/5

A descent enough poem. I liked the flow and rhymes of the third stanza, disliked the closing stanza for those reasons. Sorry, if this seems harsh, but it just seems really, really average to me.

Brad

The poem has a great flow and it speaks volumes of the problems society is facing, however the last stanza lost a little of the flow the others were filled with.

Wow great job....i liked how you wrote this out 5/5