Comments : Double Homicide

  • In the ending part you should put weren't happy here... wasn't doesn't really make sense but your poem is a 100% true!! Its over nothing really..

  • 9 years ago

    by Hollywood

    I reallt liked this i loved it so much like i told you already!!!:D great job!!

  • 9 years ago

    by No one

    It reminded me of that song by Bob Dyland - Hurricane. The rhythm of that matches the song, other than that, brilliant piece =)

  • 9 years ago

    by Goth marionette

    The poem is interesting,u drew a picture n my mind...And ur message is great ..I enjoyed reading it..
    Keep up the good work..

  • 9 years ago

    by Aussie

    The peom flows well. it's really deep

  • 9 years ago

    by Jessica

    This paints a good picture in your head, it's unique and overall a good poem. good job. =]

  • 9 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    It's been a while. You bring reality into this poem. It reminds me of the crime and problems of our society. 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    A descent enough poem. I liked the flow and rhymes of the third stanza, disliked the closing stanza for those reasons. Sorry, if this seems harsh, but it just seems really, really average to me.


  • 8 years ago

    by Fredy

    The poem has a great flow and it speaks volumes of the problems society is facing, however the last stanza lost a little of the flow the others were filled with.

  • Wow great job....i liked how you wrote this out 5/5