Comments : Face Within The Mirror

  • 10 years ago

    by Lesslovedthanloathed

    I don't much like the style of poem you've chosen, your wording is ok. I find it to be quite descriptive but not enough feeling put into it. Nothing special. 3/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Lesslovedthanloathed

    I don't much like the style of poem you've chosen, your wording is ok. I find it to be quite descriptive but not enough feeling put into it. Nothing special. 3/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Sole

    Wow. Honestly, I thought some of the rhymes were off, and the flow didn't fit throughout. But the way you wrote the poem, first from the view of the teen and then the boy. It really was an incredibly emotional poem. Using simple words, 'Bang' and the talk of the gangs, rather than complicated vocabulary and riddled lines meant that the full power and impact of the poem was blunt, and incredibly strong.
    Amazing write, really excellent.

    Sole x

  • 10 years ago

    by ether

    In all honesty, this is amazing.
    It kept me reading the whole way through with a terrible, tragic story as the muse for this.
    Darn, poor, poor kid.

    I can't think of anything that could improve this, as it is more of a story than a poem. But it's still a good quality piece.
    Keep writing, 5/5

    jess ~

  • 10 years ago

    by Annaam

    Oh wow wow...!! This poem is verryy well-wriiten... And extremely sad!! I love the way u manage to tell different stories in just this one poem so very captivatingly.... I'm srsly speechless!! :)

    5/5!
    And this definitely goes to my favourites! =)Keep It Up!

  • 10 years ago

    by BrOkeN HeArt Can kill

    This poem brought me to tears because ii lost my best friend to gang violence. it just reminded me of how ugly the world can be sometimes.but then again everything happens for a reason. Great poem =)