Very, very well done. I really enjoyed this poem. It's definitely a five as is, but I will make one suggestion (as I always do, if I can:) examine the line breaks near the end. Some of them make it feel just a tiny bit overdramatized, which you've managed to avoid throughout the rest of the poem. Then again, they are kind of cool, because they might mimic heavy, quick breathing. Whatever. Anyway, good work!
9 years ago
by Lets Keep it A Surprise
Sometimes i wonder where you get your inspiration from.
Cause i'm not gonna lie this sounds alot like when I was telling you about how I was.