Comments : My Fortress

  • 10 years ago

    by Minkus

    Very, very well done. I really enjoyed this poem. It's definitely a five as is, but I will make one suggestion (as I always do, if I can:) examine the line breaks near the end. Some of them make it feel just a tiny bit overdramatized, which you've managed to avoid throughout the rest of the poem. Then again, they are kind of cool, because they might mimic heavy, quick breathing. Whatever. Anyway, good work!

  • 10 years ago

    by Lets Keep it A Surprise

    Sometimes i wonder where you get your inspiration from.

    Cause i'm not gonna lie this sounds alot like when I was telling you about how I was.