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This is Great and im proud to be the first to comment it.
i like the
"Stop. wait" thing. you made it work really good :)
great job again.
by Cotton Candy Clouds
Aww very very cute poem : ) i'm glad to hear that happy endings still exist ! i loved the repetition of the "freeze" it brought the reader out of the picture you just painted and had us imagining a new one 5/5 !
I absolutely love this poem. it's so sweet and just... real. the way you describe everything, really lets the reader "see" whats happening
Awwww this is a really really really cute and sweet poem. I love the whole "Stop, wait" thing it just made me want to read it. Wonderful work 5/5
by Mister 47
I stopped and wait and frozen y this piece soo strange one ,i never seen one like this ,
i normaly like traditional ones but this one made me want to get my cloth of and freeze !!^_^and i loved it litleraly who new you are able to create such lovely ones ^_^
Beautiful, I love the idea of this poem, its very original. You paint very clear images in the readers mind.
I will never forget the quote :
Freeze your self in that position.
I know I don't have to worry about losing you.
But just in case I ever do,
I want to remember you
Just like that. "
It makes me think of my own actions, I really honestly think I've done that, just taken a good long look to think, I want to always remember this.
Definitely one of my favorite poems I've read in a long time. <3