Comments : Gold in her eyes

  • 10 years ago

    by Teria

    "Collected in glass jars these tears
    could now tell a history"

    ** Those lines are broken up in the wrong area. Maybe try; [Collected in glass jars,
    these tears could now tell history.]

    Other than that minor thing there's nothing wrong, at all with this poem. Well, other than the entire punctuation thing that I explained before. But, once again it's not THAT big of deal it would just give it that "wow! flow!" type thing. But, it's still a good poem without the punctuation.

  • 10 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I really liked this poem. The wording was great. I gave it a 5/5.